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03-23-05, 04:42 PM | #1 | ||||||
Flyweight
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Bring da heat
IP: 3240 794D
See i still bring da heat/
and i naw mastered beats/ my verse touch ya'll in da streets/ like cathlolic priest/ just look at da crowd i got em moving they feet/ cuz i keep it so crunk dat rest losin sleep/ i neva get tired/ i'm wired/ like amplifias/ i bring dat fire/ to ya bones like jeremiah/ i take ya higha/ an burn you out like used tires/ da games new messiah/ cuz i got a grip/ won't slip/ like new pliers/ i'm 2 cold wit' it/ and since i use repitition i'll say it again i'm 2 cold wit it/ i'm bold pimpin/ so when you see me steppin thru/ don't say nuthin unless i'm addressin you/ and pass dat down to ya homies standing next to you/ cuz me and Phantom flexin 2/ in-credi-ble/ like luda we supa sized/ and we beat artist down like da jackson 5/ yo when ya'll down reading this check out dis link for black queen http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=182725 |
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03-23-05, 05:13 PM | #2 | |||||||
a.k.a prozak
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IP: 8E7F 1337
yo it's aight u need ta elevate though..was a lil choppy and punchlines were a lil weak i'm not hatin i'm just sayin work on ur raps a lil more and never give up at it....tell u the truth i was probably the wackest emcee on this site when i first came but i fuckin put everything aside and worked at it and i elevated lots since then and i'm still workin at it...i'm not a pro yet but if u want some help i'll make an attempt ta help u..pm if u do need help till then keep workin at it and i forgot ta mention u need ta work on ur structure a lil bit but u ok for a beginner
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03-23-05, 05:14 PM | #3 | |||||||
New to RV
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yo son
IP: 6510 334F
yo son i'm not tryin' 2 start shyt wit ya o sumfin' lyke dat, yo the verse dat ya juss wrote, itz not yourz, it one of ma boyz, it's da same exact shyt man, so ya gotz to do sumfin' mayne
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03-23-05, 06:20 PM | #4 | |||
Classic
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IP: 3240 794D
ok cus elevate fix structure you got potential
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03-24-05, 12:10 AM | #5 | |||||||
Ill Nigga Alert.
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IP: 0825 899A
Lol.......Major Elevation......Nah But Ur Structure, Creativity, and more rhymes ...Just elevate...Ya got potential........
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03-24-05, 02:42 PM | #6 | |||||||
Flyweight
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IP: 0825 899A
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yo i aint neva seen or heard a verse like dat. i made dat up on my own. |
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03-24-05, 02:43 PM | #7 | ||||||
Flyweight
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IP: 0825 899A
thanx fo all da feed ya'll........uppin fo some mo tho'.
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03-24-05, 07:27 PM | #8 | |||||||
New to RV
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IP: 3240 794D
yo son ma boy already got dat shyt on audio, he got almost tha same wordz az ya b. so i donno nigguh, so .................................................. .......................
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03-24-05, 07:38 PM | #9 | |||||
Banned: Biting
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IP: 0825 899A
Nice flow
Good sense of creativity and originality strcuture was Sprt of sloppy Make longer lines next time Good elevation Overall: You did Good RTF in the Dissin Link in my sig |
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03-24-05, 07:41 PM | #10 | ||||||
This is my first post!
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IP: ED88 2C9A
niCe beat dawg keep it up
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03-25-05, 12:17 PM | #11 | ||||
Sam Dope
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IP: 3240 794D
ayo youngkilla...either its a HUGE coincidence, or ya boy bit King, because I was there when he wrote the shit in his notebook long before he posted it on rv, so u need to holla at ya man...because my boy did not bite that verse...holla back
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03-26-05, 08:10 AM | #12 | ||||
...OUTSTANDING...
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IP: 3EEE C909
you have entertaining lines and your good at staying on subject. Vocab was basic but the structure needs a bit fixing. you have a lot of talent. l look fowared to seeing your name around on this site maybe someday when i learn more we can battle 4 fun.
Please reture the fav. http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=183663 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=183659
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04-01-05, 09:00 PM | #13 | ||||||
Flyweight
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IP: 3240 794D
thanx ya'll fo' all da feed. uppin fo some mo tho'
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04-13-05, 05:41 PM | #14 | ||||||
Flyweight
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IP: 28AD 5545
uppin............................................. .
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04-14-05, 07:06 PM | #15 | ||||||
Flyweight
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IP: 3240 794D
uppin............................................. .......................
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