im the illist MC-since MaKaVeLLi/
fuckin wit me-ill chop u up and rip u like confetti/
ull regret fuckin wit me/fuck the C.R.I.P/
Im K.I.N.G-for ReaL-i feel pain of the street/
hold up J-turn up da beat/
im startin to feel it-yo money yo fame to yo name-ill steal it/
stick it in my "evidence box" and seal it/
ima be real wit it/i spit wit such influence-niggas in rap listen to it/
im on B.E.T-M.T.V-yall now u see me/im like 50 sprayin im P.I.M.P/
ima G-u can't be/ur a B.L.O.O.D-and im B KiLLa-ima illa/
den any MC-put 2 togetha/and ull feel me/
niggas try to clown(me)-but they look down-cuz they not like me/
i'd sell this shit and make about 50 million copies/
ur shit is slopy-anyone record company wouldn't drop me/
they can't cop me/knock me-try and "Pac" me/
no one got "lock" on me/ill pop da glock-and spray da block/
dun mock-me/ill make u slip-and slop-and hear da drip-and drop/

short but sweet ima add it to an audio once its all finished

lets see...tupac was not the greatest..niether was biggie..

deliverys somewhat like m.o.p or sommit..

I can see you screaming over a
beat for an intro or sommit...

deliverys good but the vocab isnt there...
if your on mtv / bet I wish you the best

if you bust you gun like you say
hopefully nothin happens to ya..

not my type of rhyme but im openminded..

they say real 'gangsters' dont talk about
wat they do iand jus do it but the word
'gangstas' been taken way outta context

if its really you do you..if not be creative

not bad..but not my kinda rhyme either..

resp..

I see you really like to spell.

Not really my style, but with that said, it's pretty good. I can see it with a catchy beat (along the lines of commercial).

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Why do people feel the need to put "real rap" or "dope freestyle" as a title? With that said the rhyme was okay flowed aiight definently sounds like an audio piece but it wasn't particularly deep and the vocab wasn't anything to be proud of. It is something I would expect to hear on MTV or BET so keep doing ya thang.1

Yeah, it flowed pretty nicely - would sound doper as an audio, i agree about the M.O.P style, thats the aura i got off it as i read it too, goood flow, lyrically it was decent, too many kids are rhyming about the "ganksta" type raps now, its getting kinda old, so maybe next time pick a better topic - something original that hasnt been done yet. Not bad for a quick keystyle though, it made for an ok read.

Reply to mine: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=73796