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12-08-07, 09:11 PM | #1 | ||||||
This is my first post!
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No Score
IP: C3A3 9F2B
my head in pain, tryin to keep calm
got fould hard in da lane, da freethrow line im goin on. was angry and my judgement was clouded. da ref told me to stop, but i thought "yea i doubt it" "wanna start sumtin", i asked "cause im all about it" tried to start sumtin from da tip, nigga i got da list. foulin like a bitch i call dat shit, muthafucka doin a cheap shot, cause he do wan get a hit. anyways da brawl started on the court, teamates suspended several months from the sport. neva saw da nigga again ya c, so i guess dere was no score for me. |
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12-09-07, 02:30 AM | #2 | |||||
New to RV
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IP: 2B2D 76F7
pretty bland,hmmm thats all i can say for now..would be nice if you improve your overall structure and get down to the basics and work your way up..keep droppin'.
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12-09-07, 06:38 AM | #3 | |||||||
I made it and il end it
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IP: 65E3 9A1F
alot of it didnt ryhme,didnt seem 2 have any flow,piece was way too short,this was a no-no.keep trying.peace
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12-13-07, 04:10 PM | #4 | |||||||
Light Weight
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IP: 252C 385D
I like the basketball metaphor, flow was decent
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12-13-07, 04:54 PM | #5 | |||||||
I made it and il end it
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IP: 491C 8E9B
jus read this again,it wasnt as bad as i first thought,ignore my first feed,think i may of jus woke up or suning,flow was ai8t,still for def. needs 2 b longer,but it did ryhme lol
keep uppin.peace |
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12-14-07, 08:22 PM | #6 | ||||||
New to RV
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IP: 2326 5166
Nice drop this was good shit! Keep up the good work!
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12-20-07, 05:36 AM | #7 | |||||||
New to RV
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IP: 6BF8 8CD0
aheeee huh definatly see the potential work on structure and get done man...elevation...drop non stop!!!
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12-20-07, 04:23 PM | #8 | ||||||
New Jack
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IP: BDDA 2CBF
yea it really didnt rhymei give it a 6.5/10
give me feedback on mines man up!!!(cant smile) realist ish i ever wrot- wiley d |
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