10 lines
3-0 KO
4-1 TKO
5 wins
No hate, crew or dr votes (Bill Clinton or X_JohnnyWattz_X cant vote)
No feeding
No recycling
Due by Friday
Topic- Huntin' down your wife's killa

Me and Diverse agreed that instead of wife, were switching it to child.

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3rd battle/verse of the day, check it. A bit touching to some. Never-the-less, my verse awaits...

I be travelin' miles and miles, searchin' files and files/
The pain builds inside that someone killed my child/
I get the name and adress and try makin' 'em confess/
His breath smells like my daughters vest, so I progress/
Pictures of her precious face scramble in my mind/
Wait...Rewind...
As the time flys by I hear her spine crack from an M9/
Killer starts to attack as he takes advantage as my flashback/
I fight back as my hand slaps at his jaw, makin' his neck snap/
Over 200 pounds bounce off the ground with a vicious sound/
Mouth, "Baby, hes found and down, I'll be with you now"/

Line #7 is "of my flashback", not "at my flashback".

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yellow tape surrounds my house as i gaze upon my daughters face and bloodstained blouse//
gasping for air i cover my mouth, as the tears begin to form and gently poor out//
but my mind snaps, rewinds back, to a time when i would find lack..//
of energy but now my mind is on a mission and i've made my split decision//
as i sharpen my blade to an accurate precision//
this man killed my daughter i would be glad to repay him//
as i take my blade inside his rib cage and filet him//
slit his throat slowly...watch the blood spill//
an eye for an eye, a kill for a kill//
only one of a thousands ways i would make him pay//
but i've only got ten lines so that's all i could say...

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Ahha, you last line got me rollin'. Looks like you just wanted to end it and you didnt care, ahha.

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shit...it was a hard topic to drop on...

Diverse "Words Manifested"............................................

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both were good real good

i injoyed both

Ape
yours was deep it felt like you tried to get a picture of everyline which i find incredable and and you also discribed a great fight
scence


By APE

Killer starts to attack as he takes advantage as my flashback/
I fight back as my hand slaps at his jaw, makin' his neck snap/
Over 200 pounds bounce off the ground with a vicious sound/



Diverse

Great lines strong picture fram i saw wat you wanted the reader to picture


Diverse line
yellow tape surrounds my house as i gaze upon my daughters face and bloodstained blouse//
gasping for air i cover my mouth, as the tears begin to form and gently poor out//

Diverse line
as i take my blade inside his rib cage and filet him//
slit his throat slowly...watch the blood spill//
this was sick nice scenery


and i also injoyed your closeing


only one of a thousands ways i would make him pay//
but i've only got ten lines so that's all i could say...


overall vote goes to diverse


Peace to both

i think ape got this shit......................... i like how you rewound it and got tha killer.................deverses was good except he just stopped

vote-ape

return tha favor playa hit this shit up

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=95744

while your voting on this...peeps should check out my battle vs. dreamer...the poll is still unfinished

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good verses by both.. Ape i like your style.. Deiverse u had an ok verse..but just like kaos theory said you stoped..

overal-Ape

No-hate..props to both

Diverse would have won, but he seemed to just stop while Ape was on point all the way through...both was nice, but Ape was consistant so he gets my vote....

Vote: Ape

straight Verses...

damn...i guess that's what i get for tryin to get a laugh...haha oh well.............................................. .

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You got a laugh outta me. I was rollin'. But it could hurt you like here for example.

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