aight 10 lines
no cheating
no feeding
u drop first now good luck pc

yo iam gonna spit out at this bitch//
like when u beat ur meat over lilo and stitch//
I do not wear the hood//
for u where not even raised in the godam hood//
so stop actin and ur sister is just flashin//
and stop bashin on me for iam the hater of the kkk//
I know ur name is don//
but instead it should be switch to ur mothers thong//
my lyrics are gonna light u up like the way I light a bong//
so until u can quit bashin u do not get none of this wed smoke//

aight i dont wana waste good lines again no offense so this is gona be weak

a rematch with me, your losses have made you delirious...
your rhymes are old and gone like the career of Mysterious...
why would you wana repeat your loss again...
you easy to beat so ppl want you more than lindsay lohan...
i cant believe somebody can become so bad...
im not talkin bout the kinda bad you get wit your dad...
you think your gona get big and become a Memphis Bleak...
but you send in a demo tape and producers say"wtf this shits weak"...
you need to inroll for the 4.1.1 of lyrical genius...
cause right about now your punches come up as short as your penis...

aight lets get some votes pc

uppin for some votes drop a honest vote on here and make sure u explain it

uppin for some votes drop an honest vote in on this battle

v/don

don-you had better structure and your flow was good.........you could tweek it a little bit but other then that the shit should be good.......your punches was okay but not your best.....keep elevating man

kkk- your verse was ish........your structure was okay but you need to even out your lines more so that it looks better and your flow is better......punches wasnt really there but i felt you wasnt really trying

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aight don ya verse killed k'z
don-more punches better flow,better structure and vocab
k-your verse gotta elevate aight man but ye no beef u gotta elevate and stop usin dem played out vweak asses punchlines they aint gonna win u battle like fo example
"i kno ya names don//"
"but instead it should be changed to ya mothers thong//"

that was weak no structure no punch no flow nothin was there but b ez

v/DON

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iight that is what I am lookin for elevation then worrying about changing yea. but hey we are still uppin.

don had better structure and his flow was good......shit .......your punches was okay .....keep elevating man


kkk verse was lil gay........your structure was okay lines more so that it looks better and your flow is better......punches wasnt really there but i felt you wasnt really trying

v/ DON

don showed a lot more experience.....more organized.....punches delivered harder.....flow was better......structure made it easier to read....u need personals

kkk u also need to start using personals THEY WIN BATTLES!.....structure was kinda fucked at the end cuz u switched rhyme scheme....punches were shaky....you ended two consecutive lines with the same word "hood and hood" NEVER DO THAT.......in the future start lookin at peoples sigs,avys,past posts and threads....and all of that to find personals

vote-DON for an all around better verse

plz return the favor....i will drop a link when i get it

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thanks

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aight thanks for the feedback still uppin for battles ight thanks pc