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03-30-05, 09:17 PM | #1 | |
FiVe SoUrCe CeO
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Every little step
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I was thinking the other day about fate and future
The day destiny comes back to shoot ya, it moves ya To think action begets thought, begets movement Regrets proven to rise through, fortelling the doom, and Imagine one step one gets ahead of one's self, then some Well worded prophecy wells up to shelf, belief and dumb- Founded profound intent, grounded intense rounds of fence-ing Stabbing life with the double-edge sword, it's interest-ing Distancing the mortals from the Lords, of the ring like Benzene Boring scenes pour springs of poisoning, boy I'm blend-ing Into the rendering, of my life's perception, it's deception Conception of one's direction..no less than blunt injection Of lie serum, the truth lies in the mirror, my eyes the bearer No nearer to the path I see..grasp history and share her I'm blown away by the possibility of cause and effect One simple step can cause a wreck, which affects the rest Causing death to rest in the palm of chance, I palm a lance And fling it in throngs, supplant the wrong pomp and stance Calm the rants and the ravings, time waits for no cravings The long arm stretches meticulous, ridiculous hating Insidious hideous raging, against the machine I'm played Where I am made possible by past wades through swamp things These words overtake me, maybe I'm done with logic Herodotus teaching my new project, and I aint talkin' homage The heart check atriums dump valves systematically Not a day go by I don't ask, "What's the matter with me"? Uh! |
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03-31-05, 10:00 AM | #2 | |
FiVe SoUrCe CeO
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eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeer up
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03-31-05, 01:03 PM | #3 | ||
ONLY GOD CAN JUDGE ME
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IP:
dayum Q i see why you are mad about not having any feedback i do believe this is my first time in open mic and i now regret it being so...i was actually really impressed with this it all came together really well...
I'm blown away by the possibility of cause and effect One simple step can cause a wreck, which affects the rest this sortah made me think of the chaos thoery and butterfly effect...like i said impressive... if you would like mor e feedback pm me i'll get more extensive on it but like i said first time...
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03-31-05, 01:10 PM | #4 | ||
The Light
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IP:
hmm.. the beggenin i was feeling.. but when u start to split the words "fenc-ing", i didnt liek it was much... and when the words started getting to big, it started to lose meanng to me.. it was decent i thought..but i guess im more of a simple man.. so my text feedbak might be a little rusty lol.. but i mean, do you..
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03-31-05, 01:28 PM | #5 | |
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I need a link please ..or this will be closed
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03-31-05, 03:12 PM | #6 | |
FiVe SoUrCe CeO
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http://community.rapverse.com/showt...ad.php?t=184368
^^Those are me links appreciate the replies about damn TIME...this wudda been the 3rd fuckin drop with ZERO replies |
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04-01-05, 03:57 AM | #7 | ||
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IP:
A'ight this was a pretty tight OM...good flow, good lyrics...vocab could be upped a lil' bit...but yeah this was good shit. Keep it up, we should do a collab on a Open Mic one time...return the favor, link is in the sig. "Losing the Battle"
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04-01-05, 05:28 AM | #8 | ||
Banned: Cheating
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IP:
hmm thsi was good nice stucuture. vocab was ight but when you split up the words like fence-ing and shit i didnt like. the start of the verse was more better. compaired to the end you must off lost it and just wanted to drop early or somin i kinda do that sometimes. but damn i never really knew ya lyrics was that good. damn. nice flow shit i like this, 1
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04-01-05, 05:29 AM | #9 | ||
Banned: Cheating
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IP:
P.S Q take the wack ass avy out its annoying
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04-01-05, 08:52 PM | #10 | |
Banned: Cheating
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IP:
nice drop here yo, good shit, nice vocab, started a little slow for like 2 bars, then heated up, and middle to end was straight fire, nice philosophical kinds shit, good rhyming, structure was nice, really liked this piece, almost forgot bout you and the rtf, lol but yeye tight drop most def, keep it up, 1... 8/10
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