This is one of ma favourite things I've done so far so give me some advice on what I can improve on and that...drops links and I'll be sure to hit yo shit up....

Lo-Fi
http://www.soundclick.com/util/stre...?ID=319735&q=Lo

Hi-Fi
http://www.soundclick.com/util/stre...?ID=319735&q=Hi

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Nice beat....
Make sure to pronounce all your words can't make up some words not that big of a problem though.
Little more emotion.
Like the hook.
good job keep it up man.

Good beat choice.

You need to pronounce ya words 4 real, i couldn't tell what u was sayin, u wasn't flowin right on the beat on this one. U was focusin on spittin fast too much, you wasn't ridin the beat right.

The hook was hot, keep it.

^^Well your just def!!! haha, just playin, I might be missin something but yeah, I realise I rushed a few lines but I can understand every line well, maybe just coz its mine, anyway, good lookin out, all help for elevation...keep it comin....

Peace Out Yo!!!!

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well i dont care what ya'll say... i liked it.. keep it up for instinkz

u sleeping on the mic ?....speak up boy !

This beats so dope lol. Aussi?
your lyrics are pretty good, it;s obvious you can write you just can't flow that well, you need ot leanr how to hit the snares in the beat, at leats 2-3 time sina 4 bar set, hmm...your also forcing words in lines, you should try to just get rid of some words so the liens fit better together. do this, when you write make sure every bar is within 2-3 sylibles of each other.
pz

^^thankyou^^ Very helpful advice, the first time I even wrote a keystyle was 1 month ago so yeah I' not expecting to be labelleled as perfect, haha so I got alot of shit to learn..and yes I'm Aussie haha, peace out dogg!!!

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wow ya accent is hideous lol im trying to look past that tho
ya not delivering ya lines clearly
voice i hate srry nuttin personal
that hook is really annoying
i see the message your trying to say tho and i respect that but lyrically you need help my australian friend

na but wat r you tho?

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nice message

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