i was at near bottom/people would try 2 cheer me up, but i didnt care that i never got-um/
stared into space scar'd and hurt across my face, of hurtful days happyness w/o a trace/
glare into my eyes empty there, aint fair, how can i love if i dont care/
built sorrow deep inside my sad lil sole/digg'n deep 2 find my past but its like a endless hole/
i bring myself 2 tears 2 see if it drips out/like thoze words on my tounge juss wont slip-out/
stationary disbeliefs of hatr'd 2 my own self/im the lonly kid, like the dusty books on the shelf
date back 2 when what i had was happy/grab me juss 2 shake me, still lifeless wen u slap'd-me/
why was my happiness turn'd opposite/im wat happens wen opposite's retract, and blow 2 shit/
im broken kid wit pieces 2 prove-it/i cant do it,excuses 2 get my life goin and move-it/
im only kid wat do i need wit hurt-feeling/stealing hope, juss 2 process my lifes healing/
process 2 succes is only a matter of rest, and throwin bad memories of my chest/
irratate me 2 a certain state/and il snap cuz build up been pacin at incredible rate,2 end ya fate/
i blame myself if u think'n i was playin games/shit, notin more 2 be smile in everyone of those picture frames/
instant kurruption, take's out all my tragic waste/like the waist of chix after lypo suction/
temperature hit' 2 sick 2 be ILL/still i move around, decid'n 4 life, or a knife 2 kill/
tears of sadness run down my cheek/would life be ez'r if i was nothin more the lonely geek/
popularity, is like un wanted publicity rid'n ass's of stalk'd celebrities, who soaks in there own pitties/
ramblin along with nothin 2 show/grow old, wen young, reazon unknow, but i wannna know/
my future is a step in the wrong direction/only way i make things right is 2 crrect my imperfection/
quality insults r the only way i staul comebacks from childish faults/
i depend on my indpendece/2 resemble my own resemblence, show my full lov'd rememberence/
brutally attack my aim'd target/take orders from voices in my head like orderly sargents/


Chorus**

is life reach'n is point of end/sharpin images show ive miss'd the trend/
will i ever grow 2 my full self esteem/
redeem, wat i had pull myself 2gether as a 1 man team/
somebody will step up and show me the way/
cuz i care 4 them and ill listen 2 every wurd they say/


WAT IF I FOUND U*

wat if bullshit is my past ur here now stand'n in my path/
ur beauty blows me away, but u stand lifeless wit no pull back a no wurds 4 me 2 stay/
why we has somethin sure it was small/but u kept me on my feet and help me from my lifes fall/
but u juss gave up on me and wat i gave/lik'n livin wit out love i'd rather be a slave/
gurl i found u ur my hopes story/wen i think of u i cry like the song "new found glory"
charish, you but careless 2 u cuz ur takin, its like i juss parish'd 2 u/
ur like my medice 4 my hurts/u where the thread patch'n my wholes in my lives shirts/
out of bounds, cant bounce out of was i fell so deep 2 my knees wit blood ounces 2 hard 2 count/
seeing death so scary i felt like hell/still trap'd in my shadow's shell/
but i believe u can crack-it free/believe me ur th one no other can be/
juss the site wows me/but playin me, wat thats still astound'n me/
can clown me/ but i still wont frown on u, cuz we got somethin i want 4 have/
take a bath in my tears/2 wash my histaric 2 get happiness 2 see if opposites attract/
prsent as blown over but fate, show'd up late, but paved the path start'n at loves gate/
all i ask, is 4 u 2 guide me, i luv ya gurl, make me happy 4 u juss be side me/
ive dump'd every last bit of my needs/cuz my heart was broken, but takes a certain somebody 2 mend me like bandaids 2 skin'd knees/
ur the chosin one/i dont care if u takin/cuz im shakin wit feelins that not even i could be faking/


chorus**2 end**

i write this song in tear/i re live these thaughts in fear/
damage'd heart cant beat/cuz a certain gurl hasn't show'd 2 make 2 ends meet/
so i stay awake/brake my mind set 2 take in all i can take/
sleep wit anticapation/cuz im chasin after somethin thats already been takin/
overwelm'd wit tired and sorry hard felt days/remains of shav'ns of my past id rather throw away/


i'd luv 2 help out

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good luck wit dat

thas all i can say

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THANX I GUESS

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JUSS THROWIN IT OUT THERE LOL

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SO DO THAT 4 ME

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yo, the lyrics were well spaced out and timed for a good steady rythm, the structure was good which let me feel the emotional value of it, not bad, not bad at all.-Latoka

write it out correctly without the shorthand....that will attract more people to read it.....

where it may help you to type it up faster.....the shorthand becomes a major distraction to the reader......

and if you want to ghostwrite for people, no major record company is going to hire you.......

1. You aren't in the verse, hook, verse, hook, verse, hook formula which is what gets played on the radio 99.9% of the time
2. Secondly, you are on the Internet, and someone from Def Jam isn't going to come onto RB and just happen to look at your piece and hire you.
3.

You need to work on your flow and rhythm...maybe it's just me, I don't know....I'd have to actually hear it to determine that. But, from what I read....it is off.......
Structure isn't all that great either.......
practice.....practice....practice.....then you will get better......

thanx....

uppin 4 some more feedback

peace

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