see while im here on these streets all im seein on my blocks/
are all these god damn magnums and glocks/
seein wannabe gangstas wearin baggy pants and long socks/
and all these crack head whores suckin cocks/
throwin away there lives like they brain-dead/
rock is what we are, like kurt cobain-said/
people say i rap for no reason, but its cuz i got a grudge/
while im up in front talkin wit a judge/
they wannna knock me off but i wont budge/
well all i really want to be is an entertainer/
go one day in my eyes and u enter-anger/
im snappin at these bitches so they put me in a mussel/
im sick of bein told what to do, like when my gym teacher tells me to hustle/
dont do it cuz ill go soldier on ur ass like kurt-russel/
in this game u need to be fit, but i only got a burnt-muscle/
all i hear is hate and all this racist/
look closely and u can see how fucked up these days-is/
people say they know me by hearin me rappin to these beats-sickly/
but they dont,so im sick of haters tryin to get me shot off these
streets-quickly/

hope yall like

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BE WARNED THAT YOU WILL BE FUCKED WITH

you bitches get a hystorectomy/
disrespectin-me/
you want to feel the full efect-of-me/
hand a tech-to-me

You need to work on your structure and your flow... put some commas in there, vary it up a bit, use mutlis and so on. Also the content isn't that hot

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RIP SMOKAJOKA WE WILL MiSS YOU!!!!!!