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Old 07-09-02, 11:30 PM   #1
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just felt like throwin somethin around.. tell me watcha think..

| Freestyle |

no joyess occasions, im cuttin through more necks then jason.
erasin, what you got left of ya life, jump at me you can bet you gonna lose ya life.
dangerous situation, what are ya'll nigguhs hatin? im the new century jason.
pretty amazin, how im sayin my sprayins, still im hangin in arrangement.
into your grave is where i send you, down deep beneath the venue.
pretend you, cluck like a chicken and im checkin out the menu.
oh well fuck it, imma buck and blast it.
the concequences'll, turn yo life tragic.
have the fbi claimin, it must be magic.
or maybe ill throw ya, body out in traffic.
i mean im real why would i mask it?
bitch imma crazy motherfucker, who aint afraid to bust.
if you come talkin that shit, believe death is a must.
so i say fuck the world, gods the only person i trust.
you come runnin that shit, believe youll sleep in a rush.
climbin the charts as i skyrocket with fame.
im only seventeen but im at the top of my game,
see and you got these grimey nigguhs to blame,
cuz theirs nothing you can do to make it change.
but i could set up spot at the top of the range.
follow up dicenigratin the insides of ya brains.
got a burner that can hopefully learn ya,
you dont fuck wit dont concern ya.
for this i pray to god your a quick learner.....

~ i hate waistin a good burner! lol
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Old 07-10-02, 07:10 AM   #2
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Old 07-10-02, 11:33 AM   #3
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Not bad for a free, there were both good points and bad points to this... The rhythm was sturdy and combined with multies didnt come choppy, more internal rhymes woulda made it nice... The vocab was working sometimes, a lot of words were repeated, so expand your vocab slightly and use a deeper knowledge... Wordplay was aight, I think more punches shoulda been thrown in a piece like this, noticed some similes here and there, as its quite a battle verse thats what your looking for... Its a solid piece, aint bad, keep spitting and elevating...

Peez...
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