Originally Posted by MARVOLoUsJ1009

call jay out? dunn u betta grab ya gun and ryde with vestes-
or ima "aim" at ya moms "pussy" at 1 "pm" & call it a "private-message" -

meh. kinda weak opener, self glorification

shadow da tool-pop-often....so close ya mouth dude-stop-talkin-
be4 ya shirt look like u bought it from a "tupac auction"-[alot of holes]

nice multi, ok punch

ya name neva come up when they disscusin da greats,when im clutchin da 8-
ima take ya "timber(lands)" and leave u "wet" like u was "just-in" a "lake"-
(get it..justin timberlake)

meh. wouldnt use something like that in a battle again

u know i inspire ya sons,shadow i could tell by ya wordplay u tired & dumb-
ima wire ya gums,and ya chest aint gon "work" rite after i "fire" ya lungs-
u neva gon make it in rap u gon stay in da "streets" like "tire's & bums"-

nice.

marv's a vet,my record fukked up cuzz my sick punches is hard da catch-
shadow u garbage if i was da "Feed" off ya verse i would "starv" da death-

first really nice punch (second line) though slightly played

ima win dis battle shadow's conry plus my shits tighter-
he couldn't get a "thumb's up" on his rappin battlin a bunch of "hitch hiker's"-

pretty good

fagget im "nicer" than ya girl when she want me da bone her-
matter fact im "nicer" than ya "grandmother" when company's over-

no

i already merked u dogg but i could see u wanna commin at me still??-
scrappy-chill,cuzz im "nicer" than u r 2 ya moms when u want a happy meal-

drop the "nicer" bit

play tuff till i spray stuff and put da 40 in ya memory-
its 2 clipps 20 shots in each ima put 40 in ya memory-
a week later ya boy's a be lightin candles spillin a 40 in ya memory-

^^ didnt like this

7/10 lack of personals, ur shit had some complicated shit, but it ruined it, when i have to read quotes to know wut u mean, it isnt worth it

Originally Posted by kuniva

good spit

Originally Posted by Shadows edge

Sorry man.. had to help my friend study.. aight here goes...

Yo check it...

This cat from Queens, but that don’t make you royal…
You challenge me, so I guess you just enjoy “L”…

"L"? i dont know wut that means

You get less action than someone with gender: undetermined will
You call yourself the sickest… more like terminally ill

ok punch

Cuz your death’s predestined, leave ya hung by the intestines
Play like you from the ghetto, I bet your name is Preston…

whack

Worst pain you ever felt was a razor knick…
And your dick get less action than a lifetime original flick.
Only once got head – someone needed to use a toothpick
Just admit it…
All of Saddam’s oil couldn’t make your rhymes slick

other than the toothpic part, pretty nice

How you gonna come at this? Talk shit, but you lack the status
Couldn’t stay with me if you had a breathing apparatus

second line, use better meta

Check the sig.. you don’t pay attention to all us bitches?
Fuck ditches, pick up them britches before I live ya ass in stitches

^ whack

Funny, ignoring the rest is the only way you come out best
Your crew bout to be blessed as I leave it Marv-less…

good closer


had some real whack lines in their, some good ones also, but u lacked consistency

6/10

Originally Posted by Shadows edge

Why are you already voting? And I said no hate votes, so if this is just cuz I've been fucking around, don't bother voting

you know I'm just playing with you, right man?