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Old 05-13-05, 11:20 PM   #1
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Sakim Aerias vs Lay-Text

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Topical Battle

.::Rules::.

20-30 Lines
5 Votes Wins
No Crew
No Hate
No D/R

Topic: From Glory To Dust

~R~

Minimum posts to vote: 600

Check in by: 05-15-05 at 11:20 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.
 
Old 05-14-05, 03:04 PM   #2
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Lay-Text has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-14-05 03:04 PM.
 
Old 05-14-05, 03:30 PM   #3
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Sakim Aerias has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-14-05 03:30 PM.
 
Old 05-16-05, 11:32 PM   #4
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As I sit here, as the fire burning, in front she sits, as my future
The one who healed my wounds, with all these deep punctures
The dark lurks on top of us, as were eating our big dinner feast
Feeling so nervous, in a few minutes, my love will be unleash
Can I? 4 years, of love, is it time to make it official? With trust
My heart beats uncontrollably. Getting ready to expand the lust.
I get up, but my knees are weak. Breathing, attach with drip sweats
Getting ready to get out of my shadow, like the reverse of sunset
Without thinking, I get on one knee, and put my hand in my pocket
Pulled out the ring, and without knowing, tears started to coming
……………………………….............. ................Her socket


Wedding day



The bell ding dongs for the wife and the husband to walk the plank
Feeling heavily nervous as I walk out first. My mind is about to go blank
Each step, with each breath. Sweats drip coursing downward on my cheeks
As I took an long inhale air, with my stomach aches, now in front of the priest
Waiting patiently for my wife to come out, with her beautiful smile and her dress
I’ve been waiting for this day. I shouldn’t be nervous, for thou its an bless
The bell ding dongs, signaling for the wife to come out. I exhale, as my hands tremble
I can now imagine, her coming out, in her dress. She’ll be looking like an angel
My heart beats faster, as I saw her mother came running out, her face means trouble
She yelled through her tears choked vocals “Something happened”, to the ground
……………………………….............. ..........................................I fumbled



Nothing but dust.


In the pupil of my eyes, I saw hell. Literally, the fire was blazing from the limosine
I couldn’t do anything, I did the opposite of crying, and the opposite of scream
Although I didn’t feel the burn, but I know now that I’m being flown somewhere
Tears are not coursing down my cheeks, because death don’t have emotion ya hear?
I wail heavily now, because the baby in my stomach has flown too, he’s/ she’s with me.
Flying so high in the air, with nervousness, my hands trembles , through my feets
Sorry about leaving my future husband on this glory day, with out even sayin good-bye
As the fire burning, and the sadness creeps in him, knowing myself that I didn’t die
Myself not wearing a white dress, with no ring on my finger. I’ve left without a trace
With the airplane ticket in my hand, and a baby still inside my stomach I laugh
……………………………….............. .As I can see the sadness image on his face


G-luck
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Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8
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ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u
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ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol
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Old 05-17-05, 03:50 PM   #5
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This was feedback posted for Sakim Aerias

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R came hard but Sakin just had more words. So v/ Sakim
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Old 05-17-05, 04:01 PM   #6
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ummmmmmmmm............

he posted more than a bar.
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Old 05-17-05, 04:02 PM   #7
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or am i missing something........................................
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Old 05-17-05, 04:04 PM   #8
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I swear he's going to get strobe to edit that and post his full verse..................
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ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life.
Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8
ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do.
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ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u
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ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol
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Old 05-17-05, 06:11 PM   #9
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Vote i guess...........................................
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ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life.
Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8
ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do.
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private
ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged*
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Old 05-17-05, 06:16 PM   #10
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RoFl lay-text onli did 2 linez hiz shit aint meet da requirements
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Old 05-17-05, 06:17 PM   #11
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Man i dont know......He might got some tricks up in his sleeve, but a verse is a verse.


And damn it! Explain your votes!
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ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life.
Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8
ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do.
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private
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Old 05-17-05, 07:14 PM   #12
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Sakim Agreed To Give Me More Time.....He Is Gonna Let Me Submit A Full Verse.

Strobe Will Edit It In Tonight....So Please Don't Vote Nemore.

~R~
 
Old 05-20-05, 05:43 PM   #13
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Strobe Is Going To Edit In My Verse Tonight Man...Finally Had Time To Get Shit Together

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Old 05-21-05, 11:01 AM   #14
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As The Parallel Patterns of Worls Collide I Speak From Heaven..
I Preach The Truth To The Hearts of Those Who Listen To Revrens.
Still Noticed As One of The Greatest From Followers of Hip-Hop..
Undoubtfully..Since I've Left..Its Lost It Taste and Flip-Flopped..
But Still They Praise Me Through Metaphors and Shouts So Crazy..
Froom Beanie Sigel, Game, 50 Cent, Eminem To LiL Wayne and Baby..
From B.I.G. To BIG L I Speak Words of Wisdom Through These Lyrics..
and Praise To The Lord That They Take It In When They Hear It..
From MLK To Malcom-X..Their Words Influenced My Intense Emotion..
From The East to West..Thug Love Is What Set off Coast Comotions..
My Mother A Black Panther..Who Taught Me Black on Black Love..
and To Not Hate For The Past Sins but To Accept The White Dove..
Look Beyond The Apparent..Take Time To Think Beyond The Square..
and When Things Appear In Reach..They're Further Than They Appear..
So I Spent My Life-Span..Drifting Through The Years of Gods-Hand..
Trying Desperatly To Convert My Destiny..But Its Merily Gods-Plan..
Can't Escape The Struggle..Even Though I'm On Top I'm Rock-Bottom..
Mad Money but Lonesome Still Through This Shit Called Rock-Stardom..
The Pressure Builds and The Controversy Starts To Tear Me Apart..
I'm Hurting Friends For Fame..Showing That I Have A Cold-Heart...
I'm Letting My Family and Friends Down..Disgracing My Home-Town..
I Can't Stay Home-Bound..I Keep Telling Myself Deathrows My Home-Now..
From Publicity To Endorsements..From Street Gangs To Reinforcements..
From Undergroud To Going Corporate..I'm Aware of How Very Fortunate..
But Still I Took It For Granted..In My Mind I Couldn't Understand It..
Of Why When I Reached For God He Looked Away Then Closed His Hands and..
Left Me To Die..In The Mist of My Life With A Kid and Divorced Wife..
Through My Lifes Strifes..I'm Left In The Hands of This Surgical Knife..
But Through The Gust of Fates Winds..God Told Me To Let Go and Trust..
Twelve Shots..and At That Moment My Life Turned From Glory To Dust..

RIP Tupac Shakur

~R~
 
Old 05-23-05, 11:25 AM   #15
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Upping This Battle..

Lets Get Some Votes On It.

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