edited to delete this line and finish verse: didn't have time last night
--coward ass punk bitch, i wish i knew where you were hidin/

you this is some shit about what the fuck is goin on today, the fuckin soldiers over sea bustin they ass to keep us safe....they deserve the time, not sayin i'm some damn politician...just think about talkin shit on this one before ya do..it's not a freestyle more of a lyrical artical...criticism is expected though...it's hard to do this shit...but i tried


alright, now where do i start here, should i start with george bush/
yeah, that man's callin the shots comin quick wit an ambush/
is he doing this for freedom, or is he doin it for fame?/
or is it a personal vandetta against saddam hussein?/
fighting for freedom?, i thought we already had that/
is it really worth all the americans lyin in body bags?/
at least they chunken they soldier rags, representin they hood/
but unlike a mad thug, these niggas out to do good/
how many people have to die at the mercy of one man/
we bombin all of the cities that nigga's under the sand/
damn....didnt know one man could destroy the whole earth/
we makin him look invinsible, like he can't get hurt/
we just bombed a buildin full of poeple, and he MIGHT be dead/
i bet that motherfucker is goin crazy in his head
we fired a round at a hotel, full of american journalists/
2 killed, three wounded, it's like a story wit a sick twist/
3 JOURNALIST KILLED IN A U.S. BOMBING RAID/
20 pts for saddam, playin us like an arcade/
but as bad as it may look, that nigga's the one hidin/
this war is a massacre, and the body count's risin/
what if your boy was captured as prisoner of war/
they was jsut tryin to get in college, now they stuck in the core/
ladies and children dying?, damn those are the innocents/
i guess half the country has to die before it has any relovance/
bush callin tha shots, don't know if he understands man/
all he can say is saddam aint dead yet, time for change of plan?/
so until we find this bastard, i guess no one will rest at peace/
or at least over seas, cuz every night i find my bed to sleep/
it's sad to see the tragedy, that follows from destruction/
but before we keep doin this we need to check our reprocutions/
in a way this war's similar to sex, cuz we do it till we finished/
well let's be a two pump chump get it over with and finish


anyone that feels free to add on to this go ahead....

Aight man let me see here....



The idea about this topic is something that is kinda hard for me to do personally cause I have tons of opposing views and it's hard for me to start, but you went at the heart of the project, nice beginning, the flow was straight and came off steady throughout.

"or is it a personal vandetta against saddam hussein?/
fighting for freedom?, i thought we already had that/"
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I like to think about those two conflicting ideas as well when I hear people talking about this war, but the thing that caught me was the second line quoted there. Technically, we do have freedom, it's just that it's becoming endangered and people worring about going out and living the "free" life is being taken away, just some clarification.



All of these lines were nice thoughts about how you see it, I liked that, again the flow was good and nicely kept through here, I could see where you were going with this with your nice wordage, nothing too complex, yet a piece such as this can go in either direction, I like this effort here.



Overall I was feelin' how this piece was coming together, the first four lines quoted were nice and brought some added truth to the piece which is also nice, although....

"but as bad as it may look, that nigga's the one hidin/
coward ass punk bitch, i wish i knew where you were hidin/"
^^
That did not appeal well to me, it's kinda awful to see that at the end of a piece that had nice potential, I would say to end it more metaphorically, or even with a stronger opinion, not how you would react physically per se but where your feelings are based, overall this piece is nice, I liked how you came with the concept and brought your views to it man, nice piece. Actually if you recall The Cold War that in many reguards could and many people assume that with World War III, this could spark that, but I highly doubt it, nice piece man...


love...

this is a nice lil piece. good topic, the flow was actually really good, verse wasn't complex but then it didn't really need to be, very lil wordplay but also that wasn't really needed. lyrics weren't bad, the only thing i would change is that last bar...

yeah....the last bar wasn't that meaningful......but thanks for takin tha time