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01-18-04, 08:32 AM | #1 | ||||||
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Dynasty Soldiers Freestyle
IP: F127 8F9A
IIGHT I wanna get some feedback of my freestyle `bout The Soldiers (Dynasty Soldiers)
No one knows wats happenin.................................// Something in the core is corrupting.......................// All the skillz of The Soldiers are erupting................// Is Dynasty Soldiers rising up again?......................// All the other crews are beginning to drain.............// The power of us is runnin thru ur vein.................// We have the power to grab the skillz and contain// When we rap we shock our oppenents we pain...// Everyone fears us and our name....................// Rappin with us and with others crews aint the same// We take ur name,battle and make u shame.....// Rap battlin,to us aint a game......................// We battle real and we take it serious........// The ratin of our skillz are mysterious........// Dont come near us cuz we are deleterious// DONE |
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01-18-04, 09:04 AM | #2 | ||||
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IP: DF7B C8F7
that was too confusing the way you spaced it out so ,and take out these things /
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=105618 |
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01-18-04, 09:20 AM | #3 | |||||||
RI's prodical son
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IP: C1DA C961
I'm sorry but this was too simple....it wasn't really good, had no content...Decent attempt but it sounds like a 4 year old's rap...It's been said before...this is jus like alot of the newbie raps...Elevate..one
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01-18-04, 10:27 AM | #4 | |||||||
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IP: C400 C802
yea...^ i agree to that...
but i am at that stage to...ha... can you drop some feed on mine...? http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=107570 |
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01-18-04, 10:32 AM | #5 | ||||||
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IP: 270F 55D5
Too simplistic, you didn;t seem to have a decent rhyme scheme here...the
...............// was really just not right....newbish....I mean, you got some dope vocab but you need to apply it to your rhymes...sort the structure out first of all, simpistic rhymes....just keep spittin n' go to the tutorials forum to get some help in elevatin'. |
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01-18-04, 01:59 PM | #6 | ||||
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IP: 399E F0FD
..This is very very WACK~~~Just like yo crew~~~
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01-18-04, 02:37 PM | #7 | ||||
R.B's Demigod
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IP: 5570 9B20
fuck this bitch^^^^^ it was alright but ive seen u do better. too simple for ya style yo. good concept though. Keep reppin.
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