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Old 02-12-04, 06:06 AM   #1
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Kwizikz: Fatigue....(Enemy OF the Author)

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Fatigue....(Enemy of the Author)

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Fatigue…Every time I wanna get away
Fatigue keeps me locked in til I gotta stay
Some way, Some how gotta be another way
Fatigue keeps me locked, can’t travel another day
(x2)

Verse 1
Lungs get tight and my heart is beating erratically
Thoughts run around my Cranium cavity sporadically
Empty Heart Burns because of the Constant Escape Acts
Running away from problems like a Fugitive…Can’t go back
To the way things were…Think of the way things could be
I need to open my retina so my blind eyes see…
Wot could be, and so I can see the things that I do wrong
Instead I jot my anguish and pain on paper and write another song
Stain the sheets of white with my thoughts…My endless Self Debates
Enemy at my own gates…Try to face the truth in my fate
But the Endless Fatigue has brought me clean to my knees
My third eye…My minds Vision is the key to self belief
But every time I try to escape my defaced Situation
I bump back down to Earth..Shattered..No success in Elavation
My empty Plea...Unheard by the untrained ear.......
Fatigue...Plus my writers block...My untamed fear

Chorus
Fatigue…Every time I wanna get away
Fatigue keeps me locked in til I gotta stay
Some way, Some how gotta be another way
Fatigue keeps me locked, can’t travel another day
(x2)

Verse 2
My minds eclipsed by the state of my Vision Scape
Cannot escape…Sometimes My soul bleeds stone cold hate
Cannot budge…No room for happy thoughts..No room for love
Sometimes the worlds too tough, feel as though I’ve had enough
But something keeps me going, A secret light in the darkness
That I can’t admit to…Have to shut it out, Feelin Heartless
There’s always 2 sides to the coin..2 sides to the light
Sometimes it shines Bright…Sometimes its dark as night
Deadly melodic sound waves, escape from my larynx
My words paint my pictures…Display what I think
And what I feel…The place in which my mind rests
With out distress…Without coldness, despair and Emptyness
Paint marks stain the empty Canvas, Ink I’ve etched stains the page
Empty My Cerebellum of the dazed, crazed rage
I feel what I want…Desperately strive for what I need
Trapt in a cage…My wit runs dry and empty…Killed by Fatigue

Chorus
Fatigue…Every time I wanna get away
Fatigue keeps me locked in til I gotta stay
Some way, Some how gotta be another way
Fatigue keeps me locked, can’t travel another day
(x2)


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Need serious feedbak for this cos I may put it on my N B.I.Detained's
EP.........PZ
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Old 02-13-04, 07:32 AM   #2
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uppin for feedbak
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Old 02-13-04, 10:44 AM   #3
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feedbak?
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Old 02-13-04, 01:29 PM   #4
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ok. I wanna know something. What is the purpose of you rapping. You write good rhymes man but this shit would almost be impossible to memorize or even summarize. Or rap at a show or even recite on beat. But it was nice to read. I guess i am looking at this wrong. Maybe you don't wanna rap for the same reason as myself. I wanna read some of your shit in the cypher..that is my home
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Old 02-13-04, 05:03 PM   #5
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trust me...I could spit that....
I could find a beat I cud rap that to..
U'll see when I put the audio on in bout
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Old 02-13-04, 05:15 PM   #6
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nice drops. props on that. and don't mind carlos. i've seen many of his
post. he has sumthing against rappers that use big words and deep thoughts.
weird. but yeah, i liked this piece. keep flowing. 8/10

hit mines up in time.

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Old 02-13-04, 05:22 PM   #7
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nice peice here....flow was nice...content was creative nice meta in the interpretation of the song overall nice work


**Return the Feebak on my Battle Verse please**

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Old 02-17-04, 09:57 AM   #8
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thanx for the feedbak that means somethin...
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