Even though this is text, I dont see how somebody can use big ass words to make things soound hot because you may stumble over the words. Do not look at vocab on this just base it on how it would sound.

Beat: Tupac's "Dear Mama"

To make life work, everybody in life needs a friend//
through the thick and hard times they'll be down to the end//
No matter how hard it gets they'll be right by your side//
and when it's time to battle they won't even hide//
the presence feels good when it's given to you//
to give it back is something you must persue//
my nigga John, I can't believe he isn't here//
our bond was tight as a knot it was crystal clear//
it was horrific when I found out he died//
I didn't cry but it hurt deep inside//
My life was drained, drained out of my body//
my misery was confirmed by the 12 gauge shotty//
blastin away all the pain inside//
waiting for the day this would pass me by//
the crew got me back, back on my feet//
the realest niggas kept me from my defeat//
can't think of a better way that I can thank them//
I just know that friendship is rare like a gem//

Now m girls, you all know you're appreciated by me//
you help me control my strife which is simply//
the best thing someone like me can have//
growin up unholy in this world I thought I had it bad//
It's kinda twisted that you guys are the only people I listen to//
I guess that's why I have a different approach when I talk to you//
when I hear the sound of your sweet voice//
Annette, you don't know how much inside I want to rejoice//
I just want to let you know that I REALLY care for you//
and when the hard times come I'll be there for you//
it's amazing the way you girls have helped me strive//
with out yalll I doubt I'd still be alive//
I know at times I can be crazy//
but I'm glad at the fact you're there with me//
and when it's rough, you know my shoulder is for you to cry on//
for sure you know I hope you know I'm there when you feel downed on//

this message is for my girls and for da crew//
that I'm delighted and you're my family that's true//

this was a tight drop. It flowed pefectly to the beat and the whole concept of just givin thanks back at ya crew and shit was hot. You don't need vocabulary to make a hot joint. Deep piece. 9/10
Uppin for Fam

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a lil basic but its all good.. that was deep yo.. enjoyed the read
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http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...5937#post625937

Uppin thanx for the feedback yall

the subject was played, but touching nonetheless...^^he was right it DID flow perfectly with the beat and thats tought enough...vocab was aight, metas pretty much non existant...

score: 8.6/10

feelin' the flow for real.. I kind of agree with what u said about big words.. but I don't because go listen to my audios.. I don't stumble over shit... usually.... A2Z said the topic was played.. he was right but it didn't take away from the piece.. keep it up dawg..

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enjoyed dat nice drop

thanx yall Iappreciate yall readin uppin

no topic is ever played, i got damn got no's how many albums and they all got somewhere shit thats on every single one, dedications to fam, crew, girl whatever so this kinda shit aint about topic its about makin it personal to the dawg spittin it, n that my bro u did perfectly, i put "dear momma" on after i read it and dawg u write dis piece in tune to every bar tightness, u no i dont think long arsed words always work in shit, some of da best shit i heard is pretty elimental for vocab n wordplay, but added up how its put together its as tight as any drop wid immence words in...

overall in ma opnion 9.4/10 felt it, liked it. respect

and here is verse 1 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=66214

^Word^Yo nice drop withersman i was feelin that dawg.

Thanx yall

It was legit

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It wuz pretty good...liked the concept and errything. Nice drop...nice flow...