10 lines
no bullshit
due at 11:00 pm eastern time
im chekin in right now

forgotten cause nobody wants another bullshit white artist...
you were a fool to answer my thread and start this...
atlanta? the south...if your all so dirty ill introduce you to bounty...
you wipe your ass wit it...ill send you a value pack spread it to all the counties...
thatll take care of your filth...now to work on your verse...
2-0...im so scared...im gona rape you like brittany had by fred durst...
enough of your games...youve awoken a pissed off italian...
u thought Last of the Samuri was scary?...well whops are less afraid of battelin...
thats right...i Forgot im thirsty pass me my can of whoop ass...
your like another mestrul cycle...give you a week and this Flow wont last...

You wanna spit?, I'll cut out ya tongue and make you garggle bleach in ya mouth,
the Don?, looks like we got a Nas wannabe in the house,
if you wan me to, I can get you real comfortable wit a nurse,
the rules said no bullshit, so why'd you even bother to write a verse,
how many of ya battles was to sorry niggaz? that doesnt make you a vet,
just take ya own advice and start talkin bout how u was doin ya best,
dont push the kid, Just take a loss and do your job,
callin himself the godfather, wit no connection to the mob,
I throw more punches then Roy Jones, and keep my foes closer than my friends,
that's a damn shame, a top nigga gone be the victim of a third win...

I dropped at exactly 11 just to be stretch my timing

don got dis better punches and personals, nice flow...forgotten u need to elevate and get punches dat actually hit..no hate tho

thanks for feedback uppin for more votes i need this closed right quick i got another battle lined up waitin for an open position cause theyre all filled

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hmm.. i gotta say, flow goes to forgotten flow.. punches goes to forgotten flow.. break down:

DON:
forgotten cause nobody wants another bullshit white artist...
you were a fool to answer my thread and start this...
^second line was filler.. bad for a opener...first line was alright tho..

atlanta? the south...if your all so dirty ill introduce you to bounty...
you wipe your ass wit it...ill send you a value pack spread it to all the counties...
^ok punch about the south being dirty(dirty south).. ok

thatll take care of your filth...now to work on your verse...
2-0...im so scared...im gona rape you like brittany had by fred durst...
^you should have said something about him not being to flow or something on that second line... you said you were gonna rape him, but didtn descrive it well... filler

enough of your games...youve awoken a pissed off italian...
u thought Last of the Samuri was scary?...well whops are less afraid of battelin...
^more filler...

thats right...i Forgot im thirsty pass me my can of whoop ass...
your like another mestrul cycle...give you a week and this Flow wont last...
^kinda played.. but decent punch

over all verse was 6.5/10

Forgotten Flow:
You wanna spit?, I'll cut out ya tongue and make you garggle bleach in ya mouth,
the Don?, looks like we got a Nas wannabe in the house,
^decent personal

if you wan me to, I can get you real comfortable wit a nurse,
the rules said no bullshit, so why'd you even bother to write a verse,
^ok..

how many of ya battles was to sorry niggaz? that doesnt make you a vet,
just take ya own advice and start talkin bout how u was doin ya best,
^filler

dont push the kid, Just take a loss and do your job,
callin himself the godfather, wit no connection to the mob
^decent personal


I throw more punches then Roy Jones, and keep my foes closer than my friends,
that's a damn shame, a top nigga gone be the victim of a third win...
^played bit on how you become part of anothers stats..heard roy jones bit before... played.. other than that..decent punch

over all 6.7/10..

both verses were cool... but i was with Flow more on this one... mostly cause his punches stuck more, and flow was better...

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alright all in all good battle.. forgotten i dont know what u were talkin about nas wannabe don is italian i think.. lol well anyways don good verse i liked the dirty punches and the fred durst line good flow....forgotten u had a real good verse too... nice punches.. but i think dons verse just came a little harder.. vote goes to don

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DON
structure was ok...u had some stretched lines though...flow was decent...u had some metas...wordplay was pretty good...most of ur punches connected...personals were alright...

Forgotten Flow
structure was aight...some of ur lines were stretched as well...flow was ok...u had a few metas...wordplay was simple and basic...a few of ur punches connected...personals were good...

Overall
neither had a good structure...both had an ok flow...both had some metas...forgotten had more personals...don had better wordplay...as well as more of his punches connected...so basing off of that...don gets my vote...

VOTE - DON

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ok uppin for votes. and the the nas shit was because Nas calls hiself the Don

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