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05-07-07, 11:12 AM
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It's Me Bitches
IP: 33E3 44D7
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3165221
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=241859 It's been about week since I test my skill Don test me but couldnt pass cuz my skillz is ill Na I aint sick so I say that my skillz for real Now niggaz shittin bricks when I call em out I'm like dudes just chill Young Sin all day everyday, in tha streetz, been gone for a minute I gotta battle wit Lay Fear and that bitch bout to get it ( Dont get pissed mane) Cuz this nigga got line after line and I always rip shit A Legend down South, From Florida to Texas tha Prince of these raps Spit We can battle for ya money call me Rap's Royalty I cant be beat I aint Krs-1 but I can teach, I aint shit like T.D Jakes but wit raps I can preach I'm like tha best general in tha army cuz we can battle and I'll serve you defeat I gotta be tha best to do this.. let tha truth be told Cuz I could murk you M.c's if I dropped verses in Morse Code I'm cocky as fuck, but my lyrics speak for they self my words is so cold And ya'll wanna battle me, ya'll bitches is so bold I aint Nasir Jones but I'm spittin Ether at you bitches I locked up twice cuz I didnt know that these niggaz was snitchin We could get in tha streetz Fuck wit me then ya wig'll be slpittin I'm a Country boy My grandma feed me Collar Greens Cornbread and Chicken Ya'll know wuts up when you fuck wit Young Sin I'll bring you to ya knees and ya life to an end I just started back battlin n awready got my first win I am Tha Death Angel n It's time for Death to begin
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I'm Sicker Than Tha Plauges That God Sent Moses-Chosen Last edited by Young Sin : 05-07-07 at 11:25 AM. Reason: Addin More |
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05-07-07, 09:47 PM
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IP: 26FC 8E94
pretty good man....punches on some lines were a little off....but you stayed on point for the most part....try being more creative with thought though...i notice from reading previous post of yours...its pretty much like the same topic...well your probably freestyling to....for the most part though u are good with punches/metas...multis wordplay and all that great shit....try something new....something different to see what else u can do with writing....~1~
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05-08-07, 01:14 PM
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IP: 8FB1 3D8E
could of focus more on punches... some lines seem like you was just rambling about stuff that u'r ill and hot and ill and hot you told them you ill and hot now show'em why and get into it ya dig i felt you had potential to make it a good read but it sorda lack a bit i mean i still read it and it wasnt to bad just keep droping them it'll come to you soon enuff...
i mean atless you got the point of a flow most cant even get a flow so just work on the rest u got potential like i said.... |
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