This is more of'a freestyle...then a poem...but already dropped in open mic....so heres a lil summin summin....pz

Your lookin at me with your eyes closed trapped behind locked doors
Hidding in the shadows of realistic veiws that i'm basically the same as you
Fooled by the stereotype of my image classifien me as'a joke like scrimage
Scrownging for a position in lifes game cuz the role i play is driven me insane
Tick tick im'a time bomb ready to explode cock back point at you and re-load
Explicent content in lifes roles except the act of your character is out of your control
As your critisize my playing i'll lay awake in my bed screaming and praying
That the influences of eachother arent clustered but rather show love for another
Encourage somebody who wasnt as blessed don't provoke them to question death
Seez the moment as it comes along stang strong for differance dont be alarmed
For if you open your eyes and see clear we exactly alike like you in..and you in'a mirror

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

uppen...this is short...an easy reply to send...pz

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

Uppen

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

Hey i think this was a nice short piece...the rhyme scheme flowed beautifully..I've actually always wanted to write a poem intitled..."mirror image" So props on that...Everyday life is a gfood example of this piece...nicely done...

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realy realy nice poem
you did it with feelin its wat i got out of it
keep it up its a nice stress relife after battles ima start soon
great stuff




peace

thansk deacon thats tight comen from a higher vet...and Rhymes thanks thats apreciated pz

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

this was nice
i agree, the flow was str8 throughout the whole piece
nicely written, no complaints
keep it up hun

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Poetry
Don't Look Into My Eyes Forgotten
Understanding Once Again
"It requires wisdom to understand wisdom:
the music is nothing if the audience is deaf."

thanks uppen

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

this was a great it flowed throughout da whole piece. it was nicely written.

thank u

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

This is some nice shit rule, so was the other one. Glad to have you as apart of the crew. Keep this up hommie. I might put my poems on here one, but I dont know if everyone is ready for my emotions just yet LOL good drop hommie, I was feeling this.

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-High Class a.k.a Confusion

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