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Old 02-09-04, 01:19 PM   #1
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Disillusioned

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Chorus

Disillusioned by the pain of my past, the mere confusion,
Of it all set in stone, was made to last, i spy contrasts
Between here and now, sweat and tears form on my brow,
A innocent left, wondering how?..Why? and who am i?
Who am i? Who am i to judge what i see?
To take into account all the troubles bothering me
And try to change, the final hand of fate, to set us free?
All i know now is that the Lord frowns down upon me.


Shadows move, cast empty ruins, and dark accross the floor,
The Devil spited another brother, soon to enter heavens door
Or to be turned away? because he always asked for more?
Greed breeds like wildfire, its becoming harder to ignore
When they die we wonder why as we cry into the casket
Last goodbyes and weary eyes when we pull out a gun and blast it,
Holy limit? we've flew right past it! all the crimes our time commits!
Got us thinking, hearts are sinking, desires pried from evil mits
Offered nothing, stole the lot, chased to the edge by the law,
But if everyone is equal, why are children dying for? Justice done?
Or rather justice maimed, only get money through deception
Fat cats should be ashamed, criminals blamed, furthur inspection
Bribes payed to get by, to keep bread and water on the table
They all want to feed their families, but most of them aint able
Equality is bullshit, racism goes to prove, if your skin color is different..
Then you always seem to lose, creed and religion cause troubles
Whatever happened? 'Thou Shalt Not Kill' but the Lord din't make it good
Anger built up inside us, and w'ell release it on the hood...


Chorus

Disillusioned by the pain of my past, the mere confusion,
Of it all set in stone, was made to last, i spy contrasts
Between here and now, sweat and tears form on my brow,
A innocent left, wondering how?..Why? and who am i?
Who am i? Who am i to judge what i see?
To take into account all the troubles bothering me
And try to change, the final hand of fate, to set us free?
All i know now is that the Lord frowns down upon me.
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Old 02-09-04, 01:23 PM   #2
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nice...alot better than your last one..maybe the best from you...your imagery was dope...your flow was on point..it's nice to see you progress..peace..~~
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Old 02-09-04, 02:07 PM   #3
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Nice Fanta! I do agree this was better than your last! Your imagery was great.....your flow was nice an smooth and vocab was good as well.....I like the chorus.....this would make a great song if you collabed or finished on your own........good job once again.....i just dropped my latest.......lemme know what you think.....

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Old 02-10-04, 12:06 PM   #4
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collab...you know, that aint a bad idea, if i could get somebody to rap the verses and i could sing the chorus..add in a dope backing tune and wa la...we got a song...hhm..come up with another 2 verses? not a bad idea..i may well just do that..

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