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Old 11-19-03, 04:21 PM   #1
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I'm sick of you treating me like shit, I'm not a bitch, gain some respect,
Its not just emotional pain, its more physical, its what no one expects,
Just last night you beat me until your hands hurt and my face showed red,
You laid me lying there in a pool of my own blood, wishing I was dead,
You're messing with my head, one minute you hold love for me, the next its hate,
You're about to put me in my grave, but I'm not one to sit and wait,
The next time you hit me, I'm not going to run, hide, or even cower,
When I come back at you, you'll be shocked, but this rage has me overpowered,
I'm sick of crying myself to sleep, with open wounds all acrossed my cheek,
You can't do this to anymore, I'm standing up to you, I'm no longer weak,
I dont deserve this, and you can't do this to me, I'm not going to let you,
I'm fighting back, I'm walking out of your life, and theres nothing you can do.
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Old 11-19-03, 04:26 PM   #2
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i love it ayngel..............you painted a very descriptive picture. hopefully everything turned out for the better if this was a personal experience...keep doing ya thang
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Old 11-19-03, 06:29 PM   #3
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thankz yo... keep tha responsez comin... much love.
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Old 11-19-03, 07:30 PM   #4
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Much love gurl. This is something that hit me deep. I too was beaten by one of my boyfriends, and I didnt have the drive to get away. But eventually I did. There was madd emotion here, and I felt it all. It brought a tear to my eye, especially cause of the memories. Great job gurl. One of ur best. Most respect.
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Old 11-19-03, 07:49 PM   #5
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yo that shit was tight. there was alot of emotion running thrught this piece. i can relate to the so much and i think that is why it hit me so hard. good job girl
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Old 11-19-03, 09:52 PM   #6
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thanks ma.. much appreciated.
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Old 11-19-03, 10:40 PM   #7
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this was straight out good shit. Not procrastinating and standin up for yourself. It fit altogether nicely and had no flaws. Spect JT
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Old 11-19-03, 10:48 PM   #8
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good shit.. mwaha.. thankz pa...* keep 'em comin y'all
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Old 11-20-03, 07:18 PM   #9
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uppin?
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Old 11-20-03, 07:43 PM   #10
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nicely written -I wouldn't even change a word in that piece!

Hope to see some more of your work
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Old 11-20-03, 08:32 PM   #11
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thanks yo
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Old 11-20-03, 08:46 PM   #12
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This piece has alot of emotion
i felt it from begining to end
nothing else is needed to be said
this was nice
keep writing
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Old 11-20-03, 08:57 PM   #13
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thanks much ma..
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