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03-16-07, 09:15 AM | #1 | |||||||
I'm Talented.Period.
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"Power Within"...a real song with a nice hook
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03-16-07, 11:47 AM | #2 | ||||
I don't lose
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niceeeeeeeee with the start....with the sample then fade to black n bring it back....i love the rhyme scheme that opened the song....really get you to pay attention...the hook is very amaturish....you start okay on it....but its pretty evident you struggle with the high notes....keep it low i see what you were tryin to do with goin high....but it seems to be a little higher then your range.....the next verse is good, but it would benifit from some more adlibs to add a third demsion to the track...have the listener listing to numerous things at once....ya know?? the hook at the end you didnt go as high as the other hooks it seems, still kinda eh, but better....a lil lower then that one n i fell youd be back in your vocal range, otherwise nice stuff....with an inspired meaning
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dad said, son you're fucking high and i thought, yeah there's a first for everything so i took my old man's advice three sad semesters it was only fifteen grand spent in bed i thought about the army i dropped out and joined a band instead |
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03-16-07, 06:40 PM | #3 | |||||||
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beats dope....
shit is nice, delivery's nice, lyrics are dope, flows on... n i agree with what 286 said bout the hook, seems like the note needed is just outta ur range, but still sounded nice, alot higher that i could get, but you might wanna try a version using the above advice n try a lower hook n compare the 2, the end hook i liked the way you did up too, like 286 said, a lil lower than the others, this was a nice listen man, good stuff... listened a couple other of ur tracks, cant hold me especially interested me cuz i sued the same beat about a year ago, you did a real nice job on that shit guy, keep it up man...good stuff... |
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03-16-07, 11:18 PM | #4 | |||||||
I'm Talented.Period.
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IP: 9B2C 9A4D
preciate da feed bro
will RTF asap 1 |
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