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10-17-04, 07:24 PM | #1 | ||||
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Do-It
IP: CB67 5019
get it pump in tha club
roll on them 24'' dubs bust a head with a bottle full of bub get yo hair dirty in tha mud in tha club erbody throw yo L's up gone get yo self a pimp cup if u swing at me and miss u better duck if u get killed than thats yo luck while tha playa haters stuck im on tha street trying to make a quick buck grab a straw cuz yo team really suck M.I.C rocking it aint no stoping it the pimp fluit shake something a little bit and if u wanna do somthing gon do it if u wanna start somthing gon do it,do it, do it if u get crunk gon do it, do it, do it if u wanna do something gon do it, do it, do it in tha club D.J aint missing a beat and still rocking on his feet we having a party in tha and tha street before i go my momma tell me to stay neat i wear tha colagne intution shoot shoot i aint to smart so dont make me give u tha definition in tha club we play Quick to back down, Neva eva, and Head bussa a ya we some dottyda hustlers if u come up to us stupid we gonna find yo mother in tha club just make it clap all my raw gangstas straped if u a bird boy gon make yo wings flap tha club dont end so we aint taking nap gon to tha floor grab you a girl we rude niggas we dont buy u no pearls act stupid we gon make yo head swirl if u wanna start something gon do it, do it, do it if u wanna get crunk gon do it, do it, do it if u wanna do something gon do it, do it, do it A ya erbody,erbody in tha club getting tipsy all tha niggas are with me while tha girls get thier close from tha mall seen im a real baller and only 4 feet tall representing my home is what i do bust a haters head if they try to act a fool in tha club we play them crunk songs we dont play tha rhtyem and blues erbody in tha club wearing them rim rocka shoes bang bang dont u hear tha sound of tha gun u best run im gon let u lesson cuz lil mark is done. Last edited by Lil Mark : 10-17-04 at 07:46 PM. |
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10-17-04, 08:15 PM | #2 | |||||||
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IP: 4C7C D5BE
allright...
i liked your flow and ability to stay on topic, the verse was nice. You got a decent vocab. too. Nice Nice Nice But... You should try to add more complexity to your flow, like some punches, or multi's or internal rhyme. The more stuff you do with the verse, the more it's gonna shine. It's like a girl with a pretty face, sure she's iight, but wouldn't it be nice if she had some titties and a bangin ass too? ya kno, spice it up!!! BlanKo |
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10-17-04, 10:53 PM | #3 | ||||||
Flyweight
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IP: 1B3B C284
this was meh, you gotta work on your flow, structure your bars better add multis to make it flow better, i dont really dig the gangsta flow unless there's some witty shit in it, like hard punches or some shit cause this was sounds good reading it. rating this a 2.8/5, keep dropping you need to elevate and this is the best way to, peace out!
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10-18-04, 02:12 AM | #4 | |||||||
I can rap and stuff.
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IP: ABE5 5A5C
Smh. Simple lyrics, bad flow. Please try to get deeper with what you say. If you think anybody has come close to what you're sayin in the song....dont make it. I can tell you havent been rapping very long so its obviously a good thing you can still elevate. Look around at some vets Opes Mics, adn youll elevate just from that itself.
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