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09-05-05, 08:20 AM
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"What Am I To Do" - Intermental (Straight from the heart)
IP: 7B5D E2A2
http://intermental.dmusic.com/
the song called "What Am I to Do" It was done in One take and its complete true so its has a huge emotioanal meanin to me and those involved in this song links will follow
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09-05-05, 08:20 AM
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IP: 7B5D E2A2
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=207214
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=204411
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09-05-05, 09:10 AM
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IP: 1ADC A69C
1st thing that strikes me is that the beat is too loud and needs to be deamped
however, I could hear your vocals...it was borderline though...you just eeked it out with the levels... Now...with your delivery...you need to up your "presence" on the mic...One way to do this is to really show emotion on the rhyming words or the end rhyme...or the words that complete a bar or a punch...and don't be afraid to own the beat man... Picture this imagery...A little girl who is 5 years old walking a German Shepherd...and being dragged by the huge dog... ^^That's you on your beats right now On the contrary, imagine when you rap that you're a 6' 6" 250 lb brotha-man walking a little poodle...You take control of the dog/beat...feel me... and, again, one way to do that is to make the beat melt around ur flow...when you write, make sure you write to the beat...flow it and listen to it...If it sounds at all like the scenario I mentioned before, either change the lyrics or the arrangement of them, or develop a different/BETTER breath control that can allow you to spit the bar or bars and remain on beat Lyrics: Very deep and emotional...I was feeling it not a bad track dawg ur elevating alot 1 |
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09-05-05, 09:12 AM
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IP: 639A 81E1
Thanks alot i rlly appreciate the feed i will definitely try this and take this into major consideration
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09-05-05, 10:06 AM
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IP: 639A 81E1
uppin this drop a link and ill definitely rtf the favor
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09-05-05, 10:27 AM
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Damn for that first track it just didn't flow for me we gotta work on that cause my flow is pretty ill but the beat was dope yo
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09-05-05, 10:37 AM
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IP: 0A3D F708
iiite appreciate it upp
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09-05-05, 01:39 PM
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IP: B425 DDCA
upppin...........
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09-05-05, 03:49 PM
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IP: 1F43 BF86
uppppppppp............
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09-05-05, 04:04 PM
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IP: D25C B392
i liek this one a lot from the hearing of this i can tell your gettin on a strong level now. your flow was consistant and your lyrics were as well. the beat was good as well, your emotion is gettin a lot better, just a overall nice lil track i liked the hook just like everything pulled together nicely man, keep workin hard your gettin on a higher level now.
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09-05-05, 04:06 PM
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IP: 1F43 BF86
thanks alot appreciate that 1
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