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01-20-04, 12:55 PM | #1 | |||||||
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Topical tourney-yer mother
IP: 07E0 A9F2
shit topic but i got it given so......
Ya owe them life cos their decision to start ya living was right But given hindsight would they still have fucked that night? Would she have taken the pill, I don’t now… she might Cos despite the relation we still argue, she screams and ignites Tries to fight,, what do I do, should I walk away n ignore it or ‘bite’ She’s been ‘nibbling’ for years, fuck it, ill take a ‘chunk’ even the fight Even out the light, disperse the shadows of her linguistic tongue Multifaceted switching from love to a gun, in between an emotional run What’s done‘s done, but the futures to come, so gimme a break Ya create and make situations worse, dunno how much can I take Straight… the earache, the long silencing when we don’t converse Conversations with doors emerge, lectures im sure she’s rehearsed Im cursed with the interfering mother, and what makes things worse First… I live with her so she tries to fucking nurse… shit, im 24 I need that like disease, what’s it all for? It’s like talking to a wall Mom please, no more… cant learn me to crawl when I already walk When I already do drugs and love their effect… aint no remorse Its my decisions, im living and there’s plenty left, but you cant enforce Of course, I don’t want to fall out, there’s no doubt in my mind Im jus tired, you’ll find we’ve got the same goals, on the same line So im fine, but ya cant confine or cushion me like im blind I don’t mind that your concerned, just gotta learn that im a man Understand cos ive got it planned, and your part of it… hopefully If ya wanna be, lets just bury the anguish and then we’ll see Cos in reality ya get one mother, so love her, and treat her properly That’s my new view from me to you, so don’t make a mockery Cos its robbery, and all ya stealing is their love… and that cost is free! |
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01-20-04, 12:58 PM | #2 | ||||
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IP: C1DA C961
..One of my favorite open mic'ers..with yet another dope piece..great content..
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01-20-04, 03:58 PM | #3 | |||||||
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IP: 5AF5 5CA5
thnx man....upp.........
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01-20-04, 07:09 PM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: CD76 910C
yea man this was good...i enjoyed tis Good Topic......i have always liked your Flow in your peices.....i like your Structure too it really good for a person who said there is no point in them.....i really like this piece really enjoyed it man it was really nicely done....PeacE....
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01-20-04, 07:25 PM | #5 | |||||||
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IP: 22F5 A53D
Very good song....and although the subject of the verse was played, you didnt "lash" out at your mother, like these kids in Open Mic...Giving credit to your mother, good stuff...Good metaphors at the end and nice flow for it...Good vocab, everything on tight...Nice work...
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01-20-04, 07:37 PM | #6 | |||||||
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IP: E38C 4580
Dope Approach. . Giving Props To Ya Mom's. . Most Wack Cats Here Diss They're Mom To Stan It Up. . Thinkin They'll Be The Next Em N Shit. . Anyway, Metas, Like Pinacle Said. . Were Good At The End. . Flow Was On-Point Of Course. . Vocab Was Up To Par. . Feelin This. . Keep Um Dropin Dev. . Pz.
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01-21-04, 02:19 AM | #7 | ||||||
Pleas, Not the teeth...!!
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IP: 3354 DAC6
Nice man...
Im not gona cut it down and explain why it was good.. But i want to comment on ur bar scheme/structure... The way u write ur senteces are very interesting...I mean, it feels like the line should of finished a couple of words back, but it feels right to keep at the same sentence....Iv noticed that Aesop can do this good...But he does it without any internal rhymes, where as you do.... Very nice man...Jus doing my re-search, finding out more on my S.S opponent...lol Ill be lookin forward to seing your piece man... |
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01-21-04, 03:58 AM | #8 | |||||||
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IP: 5AF5 5CA5
thnx.... looking forward to our SS battle....
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