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Old 01-01-05, 03:26 PM   #1
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Drama Queen Vs. Valor

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Battles Go Up Friday
Check In Due Sunday By 11:59 PM Eastern Time
Verses Due Tuesday By 11:59 PM Eastern Time
Voting Ends Thursday By 11:59 PM Eastern Time

20 Lines Minimum
40 Lines Maximum

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Do Not Go Over The Line Limit Or Under The Line Limit
Meaning No Less Than 20 Lines No More Than 40 Lines

You Must Vote On 3 Battles Per Week And Edit Them Into Your Check-In.. If You Dont Do So, Youre Banned From The Tourney The Following Week


Topic: Bulemia
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Old 01-01-05, 11:05 PM   #2
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Old 01-02-05, 02:17 PM   #3
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Check in but dunno if i'll make it in time to drop the verse cuz i just got back from holiday and i'll be mad busy but i'll do my best...

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Old 01-03-05, 09:22 AM   #4
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Here's my drop...first actual topical battle because last one was a no-show so uhm, here goes nothing...

Bulimia

All alone in this cold cruel world,desperately searching for affection
Left behind to fight my own battles,slowly going in the wrong direction
Fridge became my final escape out of this never-ending cycle of pain
Feel blood pumping in my vein,not caring about all the weight i gain
Rush of adrenaline makes me revive,strive for this moment of control
Life in my own hands but no one understands these issues deep in my soul
Suddenly my views change,totally deranged by the girl staring back at me
Body suffering of this torturing martyrdom, deeply shocked by what i see
The mirror, a severe struggle, a perpetual combat i fight every day
Instead of perfection, an agonizing reflection i attempt to chase away
Eternal scrimmage due to a deceitful image, a sense of being inferior
Seek to evade the false masquerade, condemn who i am on the exterior
Urge to get out of this fallacious cocoon, and so i start to purge
Hanging over the sink, patiently waiting for the old me to emerge
It's my dirty little secret, transformed from a student to magician
Master my disappearing act, impossible to see i'm in a bad condition
It's my revenge on the world but the only hostage is me, myself and i
A thin line between love and hate like balancing on trapeze in the sky
Who can guarantee i will ever break free out of this trap of debris?
Will the grand finale be a ressurrection of the girl i used to be?

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Old 01-03-05, 11:35 PM   #5
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Bulemia

feeling stressed, having a hard time keeping shit in order
so depressed, i am cursed with this grueling eating disorder
constantly needing food, that hunger i desire
'tis the meat section in my fridge that i happen to admire
i stuff my stomach, with that juicy sensation
seems i love food so much, it is now an inspiration
to eat and eat, until i am fond of my surroundings
use to be real slim then got upset, food was my only foundings
ever since iv been under this spell, i shall eat for eternity
but i must find away, which is to quit this non starvation journey
IM tired and often cry my self to sleep, do to always being hungry
eating until i fall asleep, or i eat until i throw up the remains
all these lonely years iv been accused of being insane
but IM not, IM just a person with a lot of issues
believe me you will never know of your problem until it hits you
and you lay in bed everyday, stuffing your insides
with food you still seem to eat, even if its something you dislike
take my advice its no way to live its quite depressing
i live this sick life eating until IM full, then resting
never sure if in my life this disorder serves a cure
i hope so, IM tired of this ugly beast that reveals to live in my mirror
i wish to get help, for my issues and certainly solve them
because no one in this hurtful world deserves to indure this problem
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Old 01-03-05, 11:42 PM   #6
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mmmmmmmmmmm this one was to close to call up on her but I have to go with DRAMA I think she had a better verse no hate homes. I think her flow was iight and u had an ok flow also but I could understand and make since of her verse and you had an iight verse but this was to close to call but I went with Drama on this one.

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Old 01-04-05, 01:14 AM   #7
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i disagree.

the storyboard element is acceptable.
but i think topicals are emotions. its
seems so much more cut throat to express
a feeling then to explain a detailed tale.
im not saying that drama queens version of
"Bulemia" was weak, it was good. im
just saying, in my opinion; emotion comes
before explanation. therefore this vote
goes to Valor. both did great, but V came with
the essence of a topic, it was not god-
like, but it was respectable. well done to both.

vote: Valor
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Old 01-05-05, 10:20 AM   #8
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^Nah, topicals arnt just emotion.. Topicals are basically writing a rap track with a topic as the basis. The best way to do topicals is by taking them in a way that no one else would think of. Cause creativity is the whole point behind rap music, and all other forms music for that matter.

Having said that, I think both came pretty well on this topic. Valor, to me, that was good, but I sort of felt it was a slightly generic approach to the topic.. Where as I was really surprised to read Drama Queens verse, there was so much description and the simularities she used really stood out in my mind.. To me the lyrics had more substance.

Was good shit from both, but I'm gonna go with DramaQueen on this one. No hate to Valor, I enjoyed reading your verse too and it doesent say no crew votes in the rules so I'm guessing this is alright.. But anyway..

V/ Drama Queen

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Old 01-05-05, 04:43 PM   #9
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vote drama...good battle

beginning/ending-drama,i thought both beginnings and endings were great but i gave drama this because hers felt more complex and spiced up it had a good transition from beginning to end, but valor did nice on this as well

emotion-drama, to me this is one of the biggest parts depending on the topic...i thought drama came more emotional valors story felt kind of like ive heard it before...there was a lack of vocabulary that could of explained things more in your verse and get your heart out but i just felt drama had this more...

vocab-drama...thought she had more drama multies were a great addon too...

in the end i vote drama...it just seems like she tried a lot harder to win this and felt she wanted it a lot more...your verse was good valor but it didnt have as much as dramas in a lot of categories and felt like something written at the last minute
no hate good luck to both

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Old 01-05-05, 04:45 PM   #10
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^on the vocab part thats suppose to be

vocab-drama...just thought she had more detailing words and upped the emotion on this...multies were a great addon too

my fault on that...
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Old 01-05-05, 05:36 PM   #11
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aight you both did really good for this topic.......but i have to say drama got this battle.....

valor......your verse was good......had some emotion........some imagry.......decent vocab......kinda felt like i herd it before..like it was similar to a degree.......you kinda rushed it so thats prolly why i didnt feel your verse as much.......im sue if you took more time...it woulda been harder to vote.....

drama.........you had a pretty good verse.............i liked how your multi's and vocab just brought out the emotion and topic a lil more than expected.......this was a really good piece i can see that you tried and wanted this win a lil more....plues you didnt seem to rush it.......your verse wasnt original..or similar....like valors.........but you def got the vocab and emotion.......good imagry too.......to me i dont know how i woulda approached the topic...but goood job..

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Old 01-07-05, 01:19 AM   #13
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Drama Queen Wins 4-1

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