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Old 02-09-04, 01:28 AM   #1
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~Think of your self... sittin alone in a dark room~
~You just go into an agrument with your parents~
~They never listen to you...
~Then an instrument comes on... an Eminem an Canibus start to go off~


Torment pulsed with choas punches pumpin adrinalin rushin
Coats an hangers trash bags an clothing time for running ~
Bombs alined for explosion throats' swollen crimes are chosen
Exposin whats ever left bullets in the gun unleashed for showin~
The Rage caged left in bottles swallowed in cornacopials
Felts death in subject matters not shinned lil scorpios~
Nerdish words preserved by sweddish odviously observed
The Curvs on the streets when movin... i miss the clergy~
Turning back? not an option the pain is pouring thru my optics
Flockics of sirens lights blairin like diamonds... cources arisin~
Faces flyin right in site flippin like pages then ends at the faces
Your heart rate dropped esphogus poundin lights crop up~
Ending seems to be never ending screaming of their voices are nearing
Stiring back to the tracks relax, fuck relax bars r only things u fearing~
Appealing a to stop running outta breath all the sounds have seem to pause
Promted to falling on hands an knees gasping with gravel in ya pawls~
Blocks away still tearing.. still scary... still heavy an still feelin wery
Darkness... then illusions feeling clueless all spookness...
then awaked by suns bacon can quite make it foodless~
Then alarmed not by clocks or *click* knots...
But by the usual "Wack Up" its still hots~

Morals Are Hidden... This One Isn't... Complex/Simple ...

What Cha Think Dunny's...

Ceasar - On3

(Oh This Is My First Drop too)

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Old 02-09-04, 08:27 PM   #2
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No love shown to the rookie??? dats madd wackness... yep
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Old 02-09-04, 11:44 PM   #3
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Damn some feed back would be nice

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Old 02-09-04, 11:49 PM   #4
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aiyo no lie gun this shit was hot mad vocab didn't have a point to it but that didn't matter cause the flow was sick and i liked how you had a few multies in there but on thing, you said somethin about eminem and can goin at that made me think you would two flows down that soundin like it would be them battlin now if did that this would have been crazy n/e ways nice drop gun
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Old 02-10-04, 08:25 AM   #5
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^^^^^^^

Thanx dunny... it has a point... but u have to catch it... but thanx dunny

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Old 02-10-04, 06:52 PM   #6
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This shyt is stupid... how can i get no love on this piece?? damn ... maddness i mean damn all u gotta do is say on dis was kinda nice ok type ish ... damn holla On3
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Old 02-11-04, 09:05 AM   #7
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last uppin until i drop a new piece.. since i get only one reply... maddness

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This was iight...

Flow was iight... Vocabulary needs improving... Get rid of the ~~ things at the end of lines...

You will improve im sure ...

To get people to comment in this forum... Drop ffedback on their OM's... Then ask them to hit yours up... Like im about to do now...

Hit up my, 'Chapter Two' piece...

Thanks...

Pz...
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Good descriptive language - Vocab' seemed alright to me. Needs some work to even out flow a bit. Liked the way you stepped back and looked at your own writing. Hit my "Broken Metamorphosis" if you can.
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