be harsh if needed

Check it out drop some feedback on this thred

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/4/mcshadow13music.htm

hold up that 1 was fucked here is a new 1



http://www.soundclick.com/bands/4/mcshadow13music.html

a that 1 was also jacked the frist 1 works

Aight listnin now.....i luv thiz beat.....wtf.....damn kid you soundin young az fuck....
thatz good tho, u startin young.....feelin yah wordz tho, some real shit....but yah needa up yah emotion and delivery a whooooooole lot....but you still young ( I assume) so you gotz time 2 elevate.....the 2nd cat juzt soundz wack tho...he tryna spit 2 fast and can't do it, he soundz young too tho...hard 2 understand some of the wordz....propz on the real shit tho
keep it up yo
and return the luv on my track below

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=114758

i know your young, and its for your uncle, but this wasnt good.

you have no emotion at all...and memorize your raps, dont read them off paper. your waaaay off beat, and your lyrics are weak(<i understand your yuong so i wont make a big deal of it)

and the 2nd guy is wack, i dont know what the hell he is saying