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02-12-04, 06:06 AM | #1 | ||||||
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Kwizikz: Fatigue....(Enemy OF the Author)
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Fatigue....(Enemy of the Author)
Chorus Fatigue…Every time I wanna get away Fatigue keeps me locked in til I gotta stay Some way, Some how gotta be another way Fatigue keeps me locked, can’t travel another day (x2) Verse 1 Lungs get tight and my heart is beating erratically Thoughts run around my Cranium cavity sporadically Empty Heart Burns because of the Constant Escape Acts Running away from problems like a Fugitive…Can’t go back To the way things were…Think of the way things could be I need to open my retina so my blind eyes see… Wot could be, and so I can see the things that I do wrong Instead I jot my anguish and pain on paper and write another song Stain the sheets of white with my thoughts…My endless Self Debates Enemy at my own gates…Try to face the truth in my fate But the Endless Fatigue has brought me clean to my knees My third eye…My minds Vision is the key to self belief But every time I try to escape my defaced Situation I bump back down to Earth..Shattered..No success in Elavation My empty Plea...Unheard by the untrained ear....... Fatigue...Plus my writers block...My untamed fear Chorus Fatigue…Every time I wanna get away Fatigue keeps me locked in til I gotta stay Some way, Some how gotta be another way Fatigue keeps me locked, can’t travel another day (x2) Verse 2 My minds eclipsed by the state of my Vision Scape Cannot escape…Sometimes My soul bleeds stone cold hate Cannot budge…No room for happy thoughts..No room for love Sometimes the worlds too tough, feel as though I’ve had enough But something keeps me going, A secret light in the darkness That I can’t admit to…Have to shut it out, Feelin Heartless There’s always 2 sides to the coin..2 sides to the light Sometimes it shines Bright…Sometimes its dark as night Deadly melodic sound waves, escape from my larynx My words paint my pictures…Display what I think And what I feel…The place in which my mind rests With out distress…Without coldness, despair and Emptyness Paint marks stain the empty Canvas, Ink I’ve etched stains the page Empty My Cerebellum of the dazed, crazed rage I feel what I want…Desperately strive for what I need Trapt in a cage…My wit runs dry and empty…Killed by Fatigue Chorus Fatigue…Every time I wanna get away Fatigue keeps me locked in til I gotta stay Some way, Some how gotta be another way Fatigue keeps me locked, can’t travel another day (x2) _______________________________________ Need serious feedbak for this cos I may put it on my N B.I.Detained's EP.........PZ |
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02-13-04, 07:32 AM | #2 | ||||||
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uppin for feedbak
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02-13-04, 10:44 AM | #3 | ||||||
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feedbak?
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02-13-04, 01:29 PM | #4 | |||||||
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ok. I wanna know something. What is the purpose of you rapping. You write good rhymes man but this shit would almost be impossible to memorize or even summarize. Or rap at a show or even recite on beat. But it was nice to read. I guess i am looking at this wrong. Maybe you don't wanna rap for the same reason as myself. I wanna read some of your shit in the cypher..that is my home
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02-13-04, 05:03 PM | #5 | ||||||
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trust me...I could spit that....
I could find a beat I cud rap that to.. U'll see when I put the audio on in bout 3/4 weeks |
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02-13-04, 05:15 PM | #6 | |||||||
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nice drops. props on that. and don't mind carlos. i've seen many of his
post. he has sumthing against rappers that use big words and deep thoughts. weird. but yeah, i liked this piece. keep flowing. 8/10 hit mines up in time. pz
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02-13-04, 05:22 PM | #7 | ||||
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nice peice here....flow was nice...content was creative nice meta in the interpretation of the song overall nice work
**Return the Feebak on my Battle Verse please** RiZ
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02-17-04, 09:57 AM | #8 | ||||||
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thanx for the feedbak that means somethin...
uppin |
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