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Fear Of Commitment
IP: A9A7 727D
I rip myself to shreds because infinity is short
when jumping on the bed was an olympic sport to keep clean or distort? I was only being honest exhaling contorts; rethinking what was promised beyond this; somewhere between handcuffs and tights underneath the heavy breathing at night with dim lights hands stay cold, like your smile, kisses become dry unlike the eyes full of sadness, making the heavens cry weather won't back up the feeling that is empty in my soul cause tears and fears will keep ears from hearing the goal stuck together in a hole that is only a half note stuck beside my role, just a simple laugh. Don't mistake it for uncaring...thats not where my heart lies all of the wearing and tearing is staring in my eyes while commotion fights emotions; devoting is questioned I will not use the lotion cause I haven't learned my lesson how I have yearned for sessions, where we could be alone and I wasn't even nervous as I hung up the telephone you didn't ever deserve this; I had invaded your home taunting lovingly but you won't throw a dog a bone my feelings all over the walls, but woe covers the floor as much as I detest it...I don't love you anymore (I wrote this while I was in the mindstate that I didn't love my girlfriend....I figured out that it was only my fear of a serious relationship) Peace
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i thought it was a hot piece very universal
good multiez 7.5/10
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yea this was a nice decent Piece man i think it was a good write..ya structure was good and ya had really nice Flow Man Real Nice ya Had a nice use of it...ya vocab was was really good and ya had very well used multis in there...keep it droping man...PeacE...
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thank you...I wasn't really focusing on the technical aspects in this piece, but hey, at least ya noticed em
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this was avery nice piece..
The flow was great The structure was like wooah the concept, and overall read was fantastic.. After reading this, im going to look for some more of your reads. Dope piece.. I was wondering, would you like to do a collabo with me? P.M if intrested.. could be me you and deacon, if you wish. again. Dope piece pz
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..I'll keep it simple.."ILL"..what more????
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