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No Crew Votes
No Recycling
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Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 08-26-05 at 12:21 PM

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c.ghost has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-24-05 12:24 PM.

Tekneek has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-24-05 12:28 PM.

yo i didnt wanna battle you coz you need to elevate so this is jus summik real kwick.

this kinda person blows and he must be cussin though, like a "shy dater" afraid ta "bust personals".........
ya can't flip on the Z cuz i'm quick wit tha keys, i must be ridin a sail boat the way i "Sail on the C".........
i'm defined tough like a rhino, you "start beef" lackin pork or pig man(pigment) like albinos...........
i bend syllables then i fill the spit, i can't "feel ya shit" if my hand's up your ass like a ventriloquist!!! (sick imagery... disgusting) ..............
this dawg is shook, can't beat my text if ya rocked the books, like an escaped fish my shit's "off the hook"...........
like portraits under water, i study a deeper-art, this shit aint gotta be alcatraz 4 me to sink-ya-bars........

good luck

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Met!culous

Im too hot when i spit the sun get tanned
When i rhyme tek stop so u ka say the gun is jammed
When i spit the heat ull come afta ya
I drop bombs on niggaz from england like the london massacre
I aint talkin bout deadly, rest in peace to them
To defeat me, crew votes thas wat u need to win
"Jump" thas wat niggaz do every time i stomp
U need dells,apples and intels just to bring me comp
In Im too hot and to me Tek is Frost
This battle like C-lo Cuz his record will show 12-3,he lost(1 2 3rd)

We ka get it on like great said , Marvin
An L u eat 1 cuz C.ghost dint want u starvin
Cheaa im sill in high skool man
Wit the 5th ill have loud sounds in ya ear like a high skool band
From the beginin I painted ya picture,Ur made
Take ya money, Throw u n da ocean so u ka swin wit da murmaids
Ima real nigga U ka say I hold my owns
This Tekneek cant be new or fresh cuz he just got own'd

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C.ghost

Im so ghost........ghost........ghost

Tri state bandit ,50 state rebel





Get soulclapped .............e-style

uppin............................................. ....................

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C.ghost

Im so ghost........ghost........ghost

Tri state bandit ,50 state rebel





Get soulclapped .............e-style

ayo we need some votes drop some here and ill do fair vores on yall battles, and dont do that gay ass record shit vote on the verse no me and homies records.....im out

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C.ghost

Im so ghost........ghost........ghost

Tri state bandit ,50 state rebel





Get soulclapped .............e-style

can we get some votes

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C.ghost

Im so ghost........ghost........ghost

Tri state bandit ,50 state rebel





Get soulclapped .............e-style

uppin^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

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C.ghost

Im so ghost........ghost........ghost

Tri state bandit ,50 state rebel





Get soulclapped .............e-style

Voted For: Tekneek

Im too hot when i spit the sun get tanned
When i rhyme tek stop so u ka say the gun is jammed
^^didn't like this rhyme..wasn't a punch really
When i spit the heat ull come afta ya
I drop bombs on niggaz from england like the london massacre
^^still...diss the other guy...
I aint talkin bout deadly, rest in peace to them
To defeat me, crew votes thas wat u need to win
^^win/them?even accented I don't think this would work..set-up was bad as it payed tribute to the dead..whereas that has no place in a battle..
"Jump" thas wat niggaz do every time i stomp
U need dells,apples and intels just to bring me comp
^^This was ite...but still..your not dissin..your just attempting makin urself look good
In Im too hot and to me Tek is Frost
This battle like C-lo Cuz his record will show 12-3,he lost(1 2 3rd)
^^12-3?,even if he lost the 1st 3..12-3 is still a damn good record
We ka get it on like great said , Marvin
An L u eat 1 cuz C.ghost dint want u starvin
^^pretty weak...
Cheaa im sill in high skool man
Wit the 5th ill have loud sounds in ya ear like a high skool band
^^2nd line was a lil stretched to the first..n ur still attempting to make urself look good as opposed to ridiculing the oppenent
From the beginin I painted ya picture,Ur made
Take ya money, Throw u n da ocean so u ka swin wit da murmaids
^^forced rhyming here....n weak punch
Ima real nigga U ka say I hold my owns
This Tekneek cant be new or fresh cuz he just got own'd
^^not much of a punch....n owns/own'd?..don't rhyme the same words.

OK..you need elevation for real.The biggest problem I see with you in your verse is that you are talking about yourself too much.That's a problem I see a lot in battles.You gotta focus on dissing.Self Glorifing is a good thing to use in like set-ups or as filler to help flow.....but you can't go using it for a punch.It's all about wordplay n shit.Also..don't rhyme the same words again as you did in the 1st line.Had a forced rhyme to..like that mermaid n ur made..the ur made just seemed to come there outta no where.And when that happens..it's forced.U had some attempts at personals too..but they executed bad.It doesn't matter if he lost his 1st 3 battles..he still has a good record at current.

this kinda person blows and he must be cussin though, like a "shy dater" afraid ta "bust personals".........
ya can't flip on the Z cuz i'm quick wit tha keys, i must be ridin a sail boat the way i "Sail on the C".........
^^OK play on name....
i'm defined tough like a rhino, you "start beef" lackin pork or pig man(pigment) like albinos...........
i bend syllables then i fill the spit, i can't "feel ya shit" if my hand's up your ass like a ventriloquist!!! (sick imagery... disgusting) ..............
^^I heard this ventiloquist line somewhere..n the set-up was a forced wordplay
this dawg is shook, can't beat my text if ya rocked the books, like an escaped fish my shit's "off the hook"...........
like portraits under water, i study a deeper-art, this shit aint gotta be alcatraz 4 me to sink-ya-bars........
^^meh...OK

OK..your verse was shorter.But all the lines were punches.So that's a big one up on C.Only problem was the middle bar as it was played.All these "can't feel your shit if you...." are played.Need to be more original.And the pig man/pigment wordplay is forced.If the wordplay doesn't match sllyable for sllyable..then it is forced.But I think you got it for less self glorifing

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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=205929

Voted For: c.ghost

i give it to c.ghost cuz i understood it alot more/ and his verse was more handled than the other character

uppinnnnn.......^^^^^^^^^^^^Bs^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^^^^^^^^^

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C.ghost

Im so ghost........ghost........ghost

Tri state bandit ,50 state rebel





Get soulclapped .............e-style

gay ass vote...........gunna get removed fa sho..........

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Met!culous

Voted For: Tekneek

this kinda person blows and he must be cussin though, like a "shy dater" afraid ta "bust personals".........
^^dont like ya structure, diss is okish
ya can't flip on the Z cuz i'm quick wit tha keys, i must be ridin a sail boat the way i "Sail on the C".........
^^worded poorly, but ok
i'm defined tough like a rhino, you "start beef" lackin pork or pig man(pigment) like albinos...........
^^wack
i bend syllables then i fill the spit, i can't "feel ya shit" if my hand's up your ass like a ventriloquist!!! (sick imagery... disgusting) ..............
^^kinda gay diss, but ok
this dawg is shook, can't beat my text if ya rocked the books, like an escaped fish my shit's "off the hook"...........
^^nah, self glory
like portraits under water, i study a deeper-art, this shit aint gotta be alcatraz 4 me to sink-ya-bars........
^^okish

vs.

Im too hot when i spit the sun get tanned
When i rhyme tek stop so u ka say the gun is jammed
^^no diss
When i spit the heat ull come afta ya
I drop bombs on niggaz from england like the london massacre
^^simple
I aint talkin bout deadly, rest in peace to them
To defeat me, crew votes thas wat u need to win
^^played and too simple
"Jump" thas wat niggaz do every time i stomp
U need dells,apples and intels just to bring me comp
^^better, not bad
In Im too hot and to me Tek is Frost
This battle like C-lo Cuz his record will show 12-3,he lost(1 2 3rd)
^^eh ok but stretched

We ka get it on like great said , Marvin
An L u eat 1 cuz C.ghost dint want u starvin
^^heh, okish
Cheaa im sill in high skool man
Wit the 5th ill have loud sounds in ya ear like a high skool band
^^no diss
From the beginin I painted ya picture,Ur made
Take ya money, Throw u n da ocean so u ka swin wit da murmaids
^^waste of space
Ima real nigga U ka say I hold my owns
This Tekneek cant be new or fresh cuz he just got own'd
^^nah

advice to ghost: STOP TALKING ABOUT YOURSELF AND DISS YOUR OPPONENT

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Fee Fi Fo Fum, now bitch I'm a giant
And your ass is like Jack, but your magic beans is wack
Skills is what you lack
I'm like a Benz, you ain't even like a Cadillac
Ya more like a Reagal
I'm a pittbull and you's a beagel