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09-12-07, 12:07 PM | #1 | ||||||
New Jack
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trying to innovate myself-doing me
IP: A1B5 6324
this life wasn’t meant for me I just got caught in it,
my heart like my mind cause I got lost in it, now im on track in the right lane, head might strain , feeling migranes i dont feel the same so you dont have to see my pain livin easy cause lifes easy fuck a gangsta im just tryin to be me fuck tryin to be g my hair still beedy but now my heart not bleeding cause im the real me fuck worrying about a dude tryin to kill me fuck a rockstar but they probably the ones that feel me u cant control life so whats the point of a planner people look up for an answer, we all goin to die its just faster if you have cancer i talk proper cause they dont expect me to have manners cause im a pants sagger and i bang wit niggas that where bandanas streets so hot our face pill like bananas kids killed the streets is a hazard i was born in this world a bastard it takes steps to be the best feel like im goin up a ladder im on my fly shit so im soreing you get caught sleepin you get killed while your snoring you only commit crimes if its boring my paperchase is the only reason i wake up in the morning money is the only reason i wake up fuck the world with two fingers straight up like food you get ate up im compared to an obese person the way i got my weight up life dont wait up it keeps movin loves ones you keep loosin niggas keep shootin and its funny how these bitches do im not even goin to mention dudes they not a product of there environment there a product of what they listen to like sharpening a pencil yall not gettin the point that im gettin to http://www.community.rapverse.com/s...d=1#post3183244 http://www.community.rapverse.com/s...d=1#post3183245 Last edited by wiley d : 10-04-07 at 02:57 PM. |
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09-13-07, 08:26 AM | #2 | |||||||
illmatic
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IP: 791C CF81
straight piece. You should work on lengthining it and being more descriptive.7/10
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09-13-07, 04:20 PM | #3 | |||||||
I made it and il end it
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IP: 5EE2 AE55
yeah str8 man,needs 2 b bit longer.but worked well dude.
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09-13-07, 05:48 PM | #4 | ||||||
Banned: Biting
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IP: D81F 7E88
decent but need to be longer...
your lines a bit to short for me but decent, this is actully u'r best i'v personally seen keep elevating..... |
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09-13-07, 08:28 PM | #5 | |||||
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IP: 9204 9119
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ahh nice small verse here i was feelin it for what it is.....i see alot of small pieces from u which is good cause it shows u can put something down....lets see a longer piece from u though something u could really put effort into like 30-50 lines long....that should be interesting....~1~
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09-15-07, 09:49 AM | #6 | ||||||
New Jack
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IP: 8CD5 B31D
good lookin on the feedback can i get more
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09-16-07, 09:42 PM | #7 | ||||||
New Jack
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IP: 7056 F7EA
can i get some feedback
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09-16-07, 10:29 PM | #8 | ||||
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IP: 9204 9119
hmmmmmm u rarely give feedback to others...hmmmmm lolz....
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10-08-07, 09:30 AM | #9 | ||||||
New Jack
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IP: 66EC 2B90
can i get some feedback
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10-11-07, 12:32 PM | #10 | |||
сварливый
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IP: 30B6 8894
Those links are not proper feedback.
You have 3 Days To Post 1 Or More Links In Order To Keep This Open Mic Open, According To New Rules. Do So Or This Will Be Closed & Moved.
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10-14-07, 06:32 AM | #11 | |||
сварливый
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IP: 30B6 8894
Closed, Moved And Stored.
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