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05-07-05, 03:18 PM
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The Plan........
IP: E3C0 BD14
They Had Their Doubts......And I Caved In To Them.... For Now.....
. . . . . Farewell…………… Its my mistake to ‘TAKE THINGS FOR WHAT THEY SEEM’……cuz that way ill never “BE A HEAD”…*pause*… im gonna live my whole life “WAITING IN THE WINGS”… These thoughts are ‘JUST KILLIN ME’…I feel lost and apart from the world…so I cant “GRASP MY ESSENTIALS” like “GOD WASHED MY HANDS OF RESPONSIBILITY”… My hearts black ‘DEAD WITH A KNIFE’…dno whats wrong or right.... because if theres “WATER UNDER THE BRIDGE” then I must be “DROWING TRYING TO CONNECT THE PARTS OF MY LIFE”…… When will I feel like ‘I WAS WORTHY’…actions have me feeling unearthly….to get of this pain… I need to ‘SACRIFICE ALL IVE EVER LEARNED” cuz “WHAT I DON’T KNOW DOESN’T HURT ME”…… Like perverted directors I “GRASP ACTIONS”… I ‘HAVE TO LIVE’ im not askin…cuz if I can achieve happiness “WITH BOTH HANDS BEHIND MY BACK” then im prolly “GONNA DIE WITH A STRAPJACKET”… . . . . . . . (years go by) I Have Arrived…….*pause* With a plan to ‘REACH THIS STABILITY’…chances of ‘ONE TO INFINITY’….I was DROWING…but now imma ‘BEND OVER BACKWARDS FOR PEACE’ like ‘PLAYING LIMBO IN THE SEA OF TRANQUILTY… These ‘LOANS IM TAKIN’ …anything so I can ‘FEEL MORE ACQUAINTED’…cuz as if I was “GETTING FOOD FOR MY DOGG”…Im heading outside the door to “BRING HOME THE BACON”……… Ya better have a ‘FEEL FOR MY BELIEVES’….dont matter if my ‘REACH IS OBSOLETE’ …like “PLAYIN BATTLESHIP IN PEOPLES CAVITYS” watch my success “SINK INTO THEIR TEETH”…… Who would ever ‘DENY MY TIES’…fell at first but at the ‘END I RISE’….Because if my struggle is determined from “THE SWEAT OF MY BROW” then I gotta put “A WATER SUPPLY BEHIND MY EYES”…… For my words im ‘DESERVING AN OMEN’… im ‘OBSERVING WHATS GOLDEN’….because I cant wait on my plan….so like ‘TIM DUNCAN TRAVELING THROUGH TIME’ im gona do this “IN THE SPUR OF THE MOMENT”…… . . . . . . (The time has come for my departure) Signed, InsighT
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05-07-05, 04:36 PM
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IP: E3C0 BD14
uppin for some feed
cmon people
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05-07-05, 06:40 PM
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IP: E3C0 BD14
???????? cmoonnnn
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05-07-05, 08:36 PM
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IP: 0AE0 3B1A
This was a dope drop.. it had nice imagery,
and some dope emotions.. good feeling The only thing that through me off was the structure.. but that can be worked on.. Flow was on point...Rhyme Sheme was good , You had some hot multies...Nice wordplay , and vocab usauge it was a good peice.. just the structure through the reader off and didnt make the reader want to read it.. Overall keep it up and drop a link or this will be closed
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05-08-05, 10:00 PM
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IP: E3C0 BD14
preciate it.....
i coulda sworn i put up some links..... hm i dno
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