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10 lines
no crew ,hate, d/r
u spit 1st

Checkin in.......G'luck.................................

checked in....no feedin........

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Havin big pun as ya rappa, shit, outcome the same for you...
Fuckin too many calories of wackness, get on the treadmill dude...
dawg if u really want it we can go round for round
but ill haft to leave u where all dead go, 6 ft underground
u think ur shyts hot but u really optimistic
u n i both no ur shyts jus simplistic
ur fukin wit shyt thats jus so sick
u couldnt beat me if u had a cure for this shyt
i cant beleive u checked in i cant beleive u came
i leave u with one thing, hangin ur head in shame

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nice dop i'll drop when i get out tha shower i'll have it up by 4:30

This cat gets no love..i no theres building tension...
..not to mention
raw talent only gets feeback at gay conventions...
this cat wanna battle.....i'm bringin tech 9's to show...
u got no flow..ya shit would be tight in u had a camel toe...
I’ma rape this generic emcee..leave him retiring like quick like jayz..
I got this nigga feelin punk’d like I’m ashton krutcher on mtv..
Ya stretched lines aint shit…nigga there like taffy wit no flava...
Hitting u wit punches so hard even jesus christ couldn’t save ya..
This is my my 9th line…still stroking this cat wit great flows...
U would think this cat is monica lewinky the way this nigga blows..

nice battle

raw talent didnt really come hard at all it flowed pretty good but nothin really stood out in your verse it was more of a audio diss or some shit to me not really any punchs or good personals in the verse just elevate some nigga and optimistic came out pretty sick nice opener that shit toped his verse right off and th rest of the verse was pretty decent good creativitie but punchs didnt hit as hard as the opener just work on stayin consistent nice verse though

vote/optimal

aight this was a nice battle but im gonna have to give it to optimal
his punches and personals hit harder and vocab, multis, struc was nice plus kid
had a hott closer-raw talent didnt really come hard so thats why this is going to optimal

vote=optimal

uppin 4 votes............................................. .

uppin 4 votes............................................. .

uppin 4 votes............................................. .

raw-Nice structure....Nice complexity.....work on
vocab and similies...Few hard punches..Complexity is aight
but work on harder punches

Optimal-You had some alright punches.....The best lines is
THe ashton krutcher line...Work on punches a lil more...you was tight
Structure was good but work on similies and metaphores
v/Optimal

uppin 4 votes............................................. .

Optimal-good flow,except for opener where u had a line with 3 words.Ur punches were OK.
Best line-I’ma rape this generic emcee..leave him retiring like quick like jayz..//
I got this nigga feelin punk’d like I’m ashton krutcher on mtv..//
Worst line-This cat gets no love..i no theres building tension...//
..not to mention//


Raw Talent-Too many stretched lines,flow was off,punches were too simple.
Best line-Havin big pun as ya rappa, shit, outcome the same for you...//
Fuckin too many calories of wackness, get on the treadmill dude...//
Worst Line-everthing else

Overall-This was sorta one-sided.Optimal had this easily.Raw,you need work in every catergory.
Vote-Optimal
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