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03-12-05, 02:13 AM
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Banned: Cheating
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Karma ft. Fatal Lyrikz
IP: 5043 32F4
Karma What Comes Around Goes Around… And, What Goes Around Comes Around… Oh.. Baby, its your problem needed to be worked Out… Oh.. Baby, All that went wrong, still I’d give you a Shout… Oh.. Cause What Comes Around Goes Around… And, What Goes Around Comes Around… ... Parallel.. I asked you out after then the night later it was Over You were all on me before, but you weren’t even Sober That was only cause someone stepped in my Way Made me feel jealous, I got mad and couldn’t say Hey Now your apologizing why it got to be this your Way I loved you, you had to brake my heart now I feel Alone Now I’m confused, stuck in a small triangular Cone I didn’t want to be the one to bring life back to Myself Forgiving you, made me feel less & less by Myself It kind of felt like you got me inspired to stay Present And there’s no reason I’d be saying I’m a poor Peasant Everyday I saw you, I loved the smell of your Perfume Got me sucked in like you were a fashionable Vacuum Then you had to go do what you should have not of Did Yes, your doing was wrong, I guess you lost your Bid. ... What Comes Around Goes Around… And, What Goes Around Comes Around… Oh.. Baby, its your problem needed to be worked Out… Oh.. Baby, All that went wrong, still I’d give you a Shout… Oh.. Cause What Comes Around Goes Around… And, What Goes Around Comes Around… ... Fatal Lyrikz.. L.ove Is AlwaysGood, But Sometimes It Still Can Get Confused I. Still Remember When You Dumped Me You Was Amused S.muthered By Your Last Words, You Left Me Awake & Abused A.nother Scar On My Chest, You Left My Heart Bruised A.nd When I Think Of You, I Feel So Depressed Deep Down N.ow That You Left Me Cold, And You've Kicked Me Out N.othing Can Compare To What I've Done 2 Make You Smile E.verything That I've Made With You Is Still Worth While K.ind Of Like What Mell Did To You After You Left Me Lonely E.nding The Conversations With Fuck You, No More Hommies S.seven Days Later You Came Running Back To Me Again T.his Time I Told You If You Left Me Again It's The End E.ver Time I Look In Your Eyes I Relize What Am I Doing R.ich Love Was What I Bin Out For,You Where & Overuling M.issing You Coz You Said You Wanted To Be My Wifey O.ut Of My Mind, When We Was Together It Was Lively R.adio Waves Traveling But In The Sequence Of Love Girl R.ed Is The Color Of Love But, I've Bin Sitting In Blue Girl I.saiah Get's Feelings To, Expecially When It's With Emotion S.o Let Me Get At You And Rub You Down In Slow Motion L.ooking Sad And Blue, Coz You Left Me And Want Me Back A.fter You Left Me, For That Nigka, You Was Treated As Trash K.icked Me When I Was In The Gutter, Now You Need Me? M.y Mind Says Take You Back, Even Though You Was Greedy.. ... What Comes Around Goes Around… And, What Goes Around Comes Around… Oh.. Baby, its your problem needed to be worked Out… Oh.. Baby, All that went wrong, still I’d give you a Shout… Oh.. Cause What Comes Around Goes Around… And, What Goes Around Comes Around… ... Parallel.. I didn’t want excuse’s, the way you talk I didn’t Care I’m there for you, you’re the reason I always act Fair And you’re the reason I’ve been loving you so Much When I’m talking to you, makes me feel true as Such The expressions you do around me are cute to See That time you kissed me, made me explode Fastly I couldn’t resist the shiny glare from your bright Eyes You felt like the one, the reason I cant tempt Lies Everyday you brought warm air to the sky’s Peak You made me feel like I was on a winning Streak We bonded, how the colour of the rainbow Matches And that’s the big reason how I know it all Attaches. ... What Comes Around Goes Around… And, What Goes Around Comes Around… Oh.. Baby, its your problem needed to be worked Out… Oh.. Baby, All that went wrong, still I’d give you a Shout… Oh.. Cause What Comes Around Goes Around… And, What Goes Around Comes Around… Last edited by Parallel : 03-16-05 at 11:54 PM. |
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03-12-05, 02:28 AM
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IP: 93C0 D1DD
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...eferrerid=36617
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...eferrerid=36617 Let's Go Switch The Flow Teach You How To Stunt, Let us Get Feed Or Somethig
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03-12-05, 03:59 AM
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www.militantmusic.com
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IP: 525D FF37
yo man i was feelin this piece right here some dope shit this shit was filled some deep emotion nice rhymes by both of u structre was pretty good flow was imbeciable
9/10 please return the favor in one of my links in my sig peace
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03-12-05, 04:03 AM
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Yeah,This Account = Alias
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IP: 3240 794D
nice stuff homebois...good emotionals feelings...ya know what fuck em' hoez...naw j/p...good structure,flow was nice...good ish
8/10 |
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03-12-05, 12:41 PM
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#5
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IP: 93C0 D1DD
Thanks Both Of You, Bump, Bump
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03-12-05, 01:20 PM
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#6
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5043 32F4
i wouldnt mind some better feed please
uppin |
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03-12-05, 02:34 PM
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IP: 93C0 D1DD
Weerd, Upping This Ish Man......
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03-12-05, 02:55 PM
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~Real Rookie Of The Year~
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IP: 3240 794D
Shit was nice Tony Green likes seeing shit about the ladies structure was good nice vocab hook was hitting nice yall should collab with Tony Green on another song like this holla at me. But I give it a 8.5/10
btw repay the favor in my O.M. still in love its a girl song too you gotta listen to the hook combined text and audio! |
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03-13-05, 01:30 AM
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Ike
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IP: EB8D 9EAC
yo this was pretty dope...Para....i like how this is a real life story and your turning it into a way to get the girl...thats nice....structure was definitely on point...flow was good as hell....vocab wasnt really there but on a piece like this you dont need a lot of it anyways...overall this was a solid piece and i give it a 7/10
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03-13-05, 01:33 AM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5043 32F4
thanksa lot, and tony i like how you said my hook was dope thanks man, and eya ill do somin with you about a gurl, ill write about this same gurl in this song word
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03-13-05, 01:43 AM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 31E1 91F6
Shit was ight for me. Wasnt tha greatest shit i ever seen, but just nice for me. I was feelin both verses tha same. Tha wordplay, and tha topic was nice. But it wasnt tha greatest in tha world, but still, better than most. I think yall should work on ya flow. It didnt seemed like both tha verses flowed in well together. It was like you could tell they was done at different times, or like, ya'll wasnt on each others pages, but still ight.
6.5/10 for me... ~1~ |
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03-13-05, 01:59 AM
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#12
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5043 32F4
tru it woulda been better if we both did ares seperate i thought that but i the flow i dont agree with, do you know what syllable count is, i used that and that might have effected my imagery but ill get my stuff back in a bit of practice sessions ya feel me
but uppin thanks for the feed dot |
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03-17-05, 08:49 PM
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IP: 93C0 D1DD
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03-18-05, 08:44 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5043 32F4
.........uppin.
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