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Old 02-09-04, 05:52 PM   #1
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Sometimes I sit here by myself wondering whats wrong with me…
Lately Ive been feeling like this, wishing it would go away quickly…
But it seems like its attached to me in some way I cant connect to…
It eats me alive, killing everything I have only if I could detect clues…
To solve this problem but its getting harder every day that I wake…
Cause these feelings are taking over making me go back to hate…
And pushing away my closest friends its like I changed so much…
I grew cold inside, hurting people I care for with my painful touch..
I don’t even recognize myself no more when I look in the mirror…
All I see are just cracked images on shattered glass full of terror…
I wish it was a error in my vision but its not its who I become…
Hopefully only temporarely cause I don’t like it like old re-runs…
But theres hope cause I see some, I doubt it will be working well…
Cause now my window of hope is closed cause my curtains fell…
Entrapping me in this surging hell and I just cant escape out…
Its like these feelings are smothering me as I try to break out…
But I cant make out all of these thoughts I have inside my head…
These feelings I have turned my heart black and just died it red…
Dried tears on my face I cried and shed over all of this confusion…
I close my eyes and see me happy, when I open them its a delusion..
The sudden change made a intrusion in my life and it just stays…
To array all the hate that portrays my day, it never stays at bay…
And it decays my heart away knowing that I lost so many friends…
That I wont get back, doesn’t this fucking shit have any ends?…
It doesn’t make any sense, with all of this thrown infront of my eyes…
And I try to make it disappear but it stays right here and I cry…
Cause it wont go away, why try? Its getting to deep for me to handle…
Its likes its just raping my thoughts away and this is surely a scandal…
By taking things once close to me away, that I will never get back…
Now I find myself here enjoying the comfort of just pitch black…


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Old 02-09-04, 06:00 PM   #2
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yo homie....very nice drop n very good read, the vocab n imagery was there, n the flow was on point, the whole thing fell into place n made it a good read..keep rhymin n do ur thang homie..hit my drop up called "my Prayers"

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Old 02-09-04, 06:06 PM   #3
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This was Okay...
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Old 02-09-04, 06:17 PM   #4
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i thought this was decent.. nuthin that stood out... and the odd word seemed a bit forced, but it was quite smooth, ive seen better.... like a keep saying, why dont you do a more lively topic.... change your angle..
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Old 02-09-04, 06:20 PM   #5
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When i wrote that i was actually pretty depressed, i just didnt care how it was i just wrote lol.
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Old 02-10-04, 10:39 AM   #6
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Old 02-10-04, 11:02 AM   #7
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This was iight...

Flow was good... As was vocabulary...

Been there {depression}... Can relate dawg...

Keep them coming...

Hit up... 'Chapter One'... Thanks...

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Old 02-11-04, 12:54 AM   #8
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Thanks, Upping
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