Echoing rhymes of times as i climb mountains with harrowing signs of past truth and lies ending merciful cries through irony's fate of subtle jest and bait ridden with incest layered by dark breaths that caress the spirit to near death as i beat my chest in raw vent before i ascend then implement the calm whilst burning thoughts of many sorts and forms resting with cohorts on ledges of rocky pledges loose from storms of torn imbedded norms fleeting on society's shores. Look into my worn eyes of formless wars fought to the core as avalanches fall i wonder what more this mass play has in store.


Cos it's taken so much as i clutch to memories of sweet touch and words such was our love so deep that i gently weep within seeping tears sparingly even in sleep. My insanity bred from dreaded exorcisms of red rivers within prisons to imbed what no longer isn't. Burrowing into nether regions of the mind n soul as it grinds me whole inside my control..

As wisdom falls of a broken sage, shackled in chains of crying slaves, churning rage n harmony in an endless cage. Others lay in my wake of opaque ways but i'll ache on up to make ammends for mistakes made by me unto fate....but never hate...




In many ways a vent. But not nonsensical in all senses. Not at all actually. I've left the structure how it is on purpose. To keep the effect. Haven't done 'open mic' for ages. Never on RB. Always spoke it. And i don't really consider this one either (more so poetry). But am intrigued at your thoughts on it. Be as harsh as you want. Or nice as you want.

I see things do get pushed down very quick on here. Well, one more time...

deep peice, ya first verse was byfar da best



i thought this was raw, keep elavating

damn, u sound a lot like jedi mind tricks tha way tha rhymes come off steadily but tha attention is more in tha words, nice drop overall

Yeah, as i said, this was written 'poetically'. No, actually, it was written with nothing but the subject in mind. It's in between this and that in terms of classing it as something.

Comments appreciated.

One more time just so someone can brutalise it.

weak

^Yeah, that's what i'm talking about. Get in there...*sighs*..

Yo that shit was TIGHT. I dont even know wat to say about that. Huge words, great flow, everythin was there DAMN. nice work. Hit me this up w/ a vote

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=76418

Gah, appreciated...

It's not the scripture's but people do respect good work here. I know what ya mean about having to up the darn things. They pushed down fast, well, as I mentioned before this is just another glimpse into the mind of a poet. I liked it just as much as beofore, but I appreciated it much more this time around. Thanks for taking the time to put this up, it desrves much more attention.....\

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^nah, it aint that bounce. I just want to hear what the people in the open mic had to say. Content's complained about the reples on here a lot. Just wanted to see for myself with this piece...

Your comments appreciated, dogg.

yo this was a dope ass piece
really feelin it... liked the structure, the vocab, the flow... just everything
keep droppin shit like this... lookin forward to read more of these masterpieces
fully respected

peace

Blah At Varen Getting Slept On. .


This was good for what it was, stuck to the topic in an abstract yet effective way i felt. I agree that this was more 'poetic' than open mic material, but the content was strong, dominative writers voice and word choice became pretty effective, helped it to flow at times when the bar lengths seemed stretched. First verse was my personal favourite, although, i liked the final line, that rounded it off pretty nicely. Very aesop-rockesque structure in my opinion, but it wasnt a bad piece.

Nice One My Man : )