get it pump in tha club
roll on them 24'' dubs
bust a head with a bottle full of bub
get yo hair dirty in tha mud
in tha club erbody throw yo L's up
gone get yo self a pimp cup
if u swing at me and miss u better duck
if u get killed than thats yo luck
while tha playa haters stuck
im on tha street trying to make a quick buck
grab a straw cuz yo team really suck
M.I.C rocking it aint no stoping it
the pimp fluit shake something a little bit
and if u wanna do somthing gon do it

if u wanna start somthing gon do it,do it, do it
if u get crunk gon do it, do it, do it
if u wanna do something gon do it, do it, do it

in tha club D.J aint missing a beat
and still rocking on his feet
we having a party in tha and tha street
before i go my momma tell me to stay neat
i wear tha colagne intution
shoot shoot i aint to smart so dont make me give u tha definition
in tha club we play Quick to back down, Neva eva, and Head bussa
a ya we some dottyda hustlers
if u come up to us stupid we gonna find yo mother
in tha club just make it clap
all my raw gangstas straped
if u a bird boy gon make yo wings flap
tha club dont end so we aint taking nap
gon to tha floor grab you a girl
we rude niggas we dont buy u no pearls
act stupid we gon make yo head swirl

if u wanna start something gon do it, do it, do it
if u wanna get crunk gon do it, do it, do it
if u wanna do something gon do it, do it, do it

A ya erbody,erbody in tha club getting tipsy
all tha niggas are with me
while tha girls get thier close from tha mall
seen im a real baller and only 4 feet tall
representing my home is what i do
bust a haters head if they try to act a fool
in tha club we play them crunk songs we dont play tha rhtyem and blues
erbody in tha club wearing them rim rocka shoes
bang bang dont u hear tha sound of tha gun u best run
im gon let u lesson cuz lil mark is done.

allright...

i liked your flow and ability to stay on topic, the verse was nice.
You got a decent vocab. too. Nice Nice Nice

But...

You should try to add more complexity to your flow, like some punches, or multi's or internal rhyme. The more stuff you do with the verse, the more it's gonna shine. It's like a girl with a pretty face, sure she's iight, but wouldn't it be nice if she had some titties and a bangin ass too? ya kno, spice it up!!!

BlanKo

this was meh, you gotta work on your flow, structure your bars better add multis to make it flow better, i dont really dig the gangsta flow unless there's some witty shit in it, like hard punches or some shit cause this was sounds good reading it. rating this a 2.8/5, keep dropping you need to elevate and this is the best way to, peace out!

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