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12-23-04, 02:02 AM | #1 | |||||
A Reflection Of The Past
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cali vs whyte ave.
IP: 28AD 5545
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12-23-04, 02:16 AM | #2 | |||||||
STROBE's Favorite Rapper
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IP: 5671 DBDD
check check check
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Overall Rapverse Record Including Leagues 94-29
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12-23-04, 06:35 AM | #3 | |||||||
Light Weight
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IP: 0349 9F1D
aight...check again
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12-24-04, 01:49 AM | #4 | |||||||
STROBE's Favorite Rapper
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IP: 5671 DBDD
Harp cords sethered by dark claws of deception destroying hope
The music of life tumbling down shattering in crashing notes The blood spills like melted wax on a heated surface Tree bark is torn apart and objected to idol worship The man stands apart from the siblings of adam His mindframe confused hatred trapped in a continous pattern His sword bloodied with the life of the innocent A body of stone on his face a look of indigence At his side stands the most beautiful woman of queens She whispers in his ear of tales and riches beyond his wildest dreams She tells him of lands long ago where he shouldve been king She tells him of places long lost of all the wonderfull beautiful things He stands proud and strong his weopon ready for war In the mist of the battlefield drenched in the rains pour His men fight and die thier spirts rising in anguish As the battle rages on and another enemy is vanquished The woman whispers of how he is to be ruler of the world A crown of diamonds and gold layered in pearls She touches him and send chills up his spine And the man surveys the valley and says 'one day this shall all be mine' The woman smiles and strokes the mans shoulders and chest And the man is drunk upon thoughts of future conquests He prepares each troop with armor and knife And the woman whispers to him 'your future is surely worth his life' He mounts his horse shield and sword in hand Not even knowing what lies in his futures plans He charges accross the field his soldiers behind him Not even realizing the beautiful woman is no longer beside him
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Overall Rapverse Record Including Leagues 94-29
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12-26-04, 11:58 PM | #5 | |||||||
Light Weight
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IP: 0349 9F1D
Slashed cut and bruised, blood pours onto the floor
She’s been used and abused, treated like a whore Wounds not seen, always covered by a sweater He’s forgot, his promise to make things better Never to hit and take out his anger upon her face She’ll sit up until dawn, praying to leave this place But she winds up staying because of the promises made But he keeps displaying anger, and she prays for aide A couple days go by and the relationship seems to be healed But the wounds reopen, when his true character is again revealed A night where drunken rage fills the inside of his head No kisses when she arrives, but he hits her instead By the end her eyes have been blackened shut Sitting where she’s not seen, attends to her cuts The bleeding stops, but the tears continue to flow She finally realizes she should have left long ago But she does not leave in peace, she seeks retribution And decides to act out with a violent resolution To all the pain she’s received, and grabs the gun Puts it to his head, saying she won’t be outdone Pulls the trigger and he crashes to ground As blood pours out his wound all around The sun rises and begins a beautiful day She’s been set free, after a violent display If we were God’s greatest creation why are we violent? The devil embraced us, and he lives within us all silent But he manages to escape Coming in all sizes and shapes |
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12-27-04, 03:27 AM | #6 | |||
Flyweight
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IP: 057F 5554
glad to see some one else actually dropped, lol
i'll vote tomorrow i'm too fucked up to break it down |
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12-28-04, 05:25 PM | #7 | |||||
Rastafari Walk Tall
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IP: B3FF D9E4
CALI:
-vocab on point - well used in right places -structure was decent -you covered topic okay- in places you strayed -imagery was tight and all the way through keepin me readin -orignality was there in a lot fo your lines -overall - 8/10 Whyte Ave -gd vocab in places some better words could have been used that would have been more emotive -structure was decent -orginality in places -imagery was created but not continuously which made some areas f ur drop boring and less emootional VOTE: cali
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12-28-04, 07:10 PM | #8 | ||||
Knock out kings fur life
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IP: F979 0B30
CALI
His poetry was better I believe his rhyming was well put together he had good imagry and he had it as if I was their myself here are the two that I loved. Harp cords sethered by dark claws of deception destroying hope The music of life tumbling down shattering in crashing notes The blood spills like melted wax on a heated surface Tree bark is torn apart and objected to idol worship The man stands apart from the siblings of adam His mindframe confused hatred trapped in a continous pattern His sword bloodied with the life of the innocent A body of stone on his face a look of indigence my vote goes to CALI |
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12-29-04, 04:06 PM | #9 | |||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 28AD 5545
aii This Is how I feel
CALI Vocab--- Terrific Structure---Alright Topic Use----Very Nice Imagery---Very Well Put together i felt as if i were rii there watching it Originality---Good Whyte Ave Vocab---wasnt used very well Structure--Alright Topic use--Very Nice Imagery---couldve done better Originality--Good Overall My Vote goes to = CALI Good luck in the future |
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12-29-04, 08:34 PM | #10 | |||||||
Light Weight
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IP: 0349 9F1D
yah my piece was shit, I'll admit that...
couldn't get anything goin with the topic nice drop Cali |
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12-29-04, 09:04 PM | #11 | |||||||
STROBE's Favorite Rapper
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IP: 5671 DBDD
^thank You Well Get Another Battle In Here Sun Dont Worry
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12-29-04, 09:19 PM | #12 | |||||
A Reflection Of The Past
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IP: ABE5 5A5C
C.A.L.I wins 3-0
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