http://www.soundclick.com/bands/son...&songID=4485883

yup made this like two weeks ago

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http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3084398

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3084400

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u need somethin takin up that space in the beginnin. its too empty. chorus needs some work, it just sounds too plain, needs more feeling an strength to it. verse 1 is pretty nice, but you lose your flow at the end. volume is good, nice choice of beat. = )

stay up.

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I like how you got so much better too. Flow is there and the delivery is different because of your pronounceation. Your accent doesn't take over the lyrics anymore, you sound more confident on the mic so your emotion is better. The hook is catchy, nice delivery on it. There's somin missin on the hook, maybe like some adlibs to give it more depth. I don't usually do them but sometimes it helps a bit. anyway nice track dude keep it up 1

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lol...i have a song on my mixtape wit da same beat.........

flow is there but ya lackin emotion....i mean i noe it's laidback but yo homie it sounds too robotic........for the hook that is

1st Verse - up ya quality...but ya accent is not that annoyin...ya flow is on your off a lil part rite before that daddy line.....
hook- lacks emotion needs more feeling....
overall - not bad but you could make it longer...........but yea work on what i mentioned above and it'll be strate.....

pz

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rtf if ya could on: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=235317

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aww damn man i jus used this beat on a song.

honestly the beginning is real boring. lyrically this is alright but its kinda hard for me to listen to cause u kinda sound like the governator. i dont know if you'll get it. but this was only okay for me. but dont give up

mmm ight thanks I guess

beat is slick

lyrics are real

flow is average

hook is trendy, but lacks zeal
u need more cockiness on track bro...

I like what you brought though


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