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04-15-05, 10:48 PM | #1 | ||||
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"Chapter One"
IP: 03A1 A28A
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/6/l...ioncanmusic.htm
Yeah this is some "Till I Collapse" type shit...check it out, and I will return the favor... Links: http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2087220 http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2087226 |
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04-15-05, 11:02 PM | #2 | |||||
Engineer / Club Promoter
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IP: 93A1 BBCD
Listneing through stock G4 speaker.
Beat - eh, cliché as hell using na eminem beat. I don't remember hearing this meinem song (if it actualyl is one) but I'd be illing ot bet that his flow was a lot liek this on the song. Flow is on and off, bout 50/50. Gotta cut them extra sylables out of the lines so they dont' have to be rushed. Lyrical content is pretty consistant. Should have dubbed up on the hook. Second verse's crit is the same as the first. Identical.
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04-16-05, 12:23 AM | #3 | |||||||
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IP: A3DA 14CB
beat is aigh...Not really feeling the flow...i heard some lines were rushed...Delivery needs work...no joke or anything, but it sounds like your taking a shit when u spit lol...Lyrics is coo...chorus is ok...add more layers to it, it sounds real boring...quality could use some work...decent drop, but still need some polishing...
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04-17-05, 08:06 PM | #4 | ||||
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IP: 03A1 A28A
A'ight uppin' for some more feed...favors returned...
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04-17-05, 08:38 PM | #5 | ||||||
Light Weight
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IP: 666C F77E
first of all...lmao...this is not eminem's "Till I Collapse" beat...this is some other shit but down to the breakdown
u sounded off flow alot of the time...lyrics could have been alot better...mic presence seemed a bit shaky...didn't seem that confident on the mic...beat could have been better and i mean way better...the biggest problem that i think u have is ya flow...if u were on point it would have made it sound better... overall - 4/10 no hate |
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04-17-05, 08:45 PM | #6 | |||||
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IP: 03A1 A28A
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Are you listenin to it on Lo-fi? I think I am on beat...but I said the beat was LIKE "Till I Collapse"...My mic is shitty too, so I blame it on my mic really about my presence and how confident I sound...it fucks with my voice big time, I don't sound like that in real life...But yeah...I was on beat with my flow. |
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04-17-05, 10:50 PM | #7 | ||||||
Light Weight
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IP: 666C F77E
didn't sound like it to me so i think u were off beat and know i had it on hi-fi
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04-18-05, 06:26 PM | #8 | |||||
L.E
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IP: 03A1 A28A
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A'ight...well thanks for honest opinion...uppin' for some more feed... |
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04-18-05, 06:50 PM | #9 | ||||||
20/20 VisioN
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IP: 5A3C 9780
jea off flow a lil, quality is ight
lyrics are ok, i want this beat lol Senser used it for something, and he wouldnt tell me what beat it is lol that nutsack lol anywayz.. jea dope beat overall 6/10
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