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03-04-09, 04:35 PM | #1 | ||||||
Herb
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Blackbird
IP: 4556 7CE7
Blackbird
My spirit's as dark as a blackbird, that's word My lyrics spark and time runs backwards, cracks herbs Armour piercing, razor tipped darts you're fearing Makes ears ring, now the apocolypse is nearing Picture the aftermath, buildings caked in shattered glass Societies ended, all that's mattered passed These are madman thoughts, fuck, my brains in fragments These drugs are killing me...ahhh.....this strange detachment! I'm drowning, jesus, in this profound thesis A lunatic, with a thread i cling to sanity, believe this Where's my drink? My gut aches for alcohol My hands shake, i'm half baked, this is nothing magical Fuckers, i blast magic, i got my craft mastered Yeah, i'm past classic, emcees get sandblasted Crack skulls and turn 'em into chalices, sit in palaces On thrones of bones of enemies, where my malice is A sorcerer slash shogun, beware when they both come To devistate or educate, bright as gold suns What the hell am i saying? I slap a hand to my temple Focus on the page, it's gibberish, it's simple I can't remember penning this! Who the fuck can relate to it? A pain marks vomit climbing like a strange judas I rush to the bathroom and retch my stomach empty Tears stream down my face, yet still the bottle tempts me My day is arriving like the march of the empires A battery of cannons lines up and then fire Sounds the victory horn! The land becomes war torn Mics are deminated, best to hate it, this art form Break out your pens and notepads, jot this wisdom The blackbird flies free, never locked in prison My eyes are bloodshot, my skins flaking by ounces My teeth rot in my skull and i'm shaking on couches I'm an addict without direction until i pick up a pen Weave a lyrical tapestry until i bring sick up again My freedom comes in beams of light with words that i rap, true But all this proves it that even a blackbird can be shackled http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=249175 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=249174 |
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03-06-09, 10:49 AM | #2 | |||||||
text.even geico can do it
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IP: 3AE9 A7D5
sleepy forum, let me feed this for ya johnny.. seemed like a flex piece to me, but still you were able to add some nice imagery in between the emotional output. I liked the way it was like two different verses intertwining the writing, going back and forth. the flow was nice, a lot of multis. one excerpt stood out to me, that i thought was dope was this, very smooth.
Fuckers, i blast magic, i got my craft mastered Yeah, i'm past classic, emcees get sandblasted Crack skulls and turn 'em into chalices, sit in palaces On thrones of bones of enemies, where my malice is A sorcerer slash shogun, beware when they both come To devistate or educate, bright as gold suns |
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03-10-09, 12:35 AM | #3 | ||||||
Addicted
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IP: A0BC FE33
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My eyes are bloodshot, my skins flaking by ounces My teeth rot in my skull and i'm shaking on couches I'm an addict without direction until i pick up a pen Weave a lyrical tapestry until i bring sick up again My freedom comes in beams of light with words that i rap, true But all this proves it that even a blackbird can be shackled nice flow hella good mltis... good topic for you atles... keep mereading even thou this shit is hella long...i was veryimpres i fel like in a way me and u same simiure style a way not exsactly but some what with the multis.... u def better much respt and rops.... 10/10 honestly i didnt find noting wrong |
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