hook:for some reason i want to believe-
if memories survive that means your still alive.............
in my heart you never died so i cry to celebrate your life....

how could it end? destined to be a trend-the streets is watching,the block take my best friend.
we was in the same-even grew up in this game.
the wake is on friday i hang my head down in shame.
never been religious where im going id never worried-
and now im seeing death as my mans gets burried-seams his life was hurried.
but i say what i can to make it correct-as i see his moms blameing me i just came to pay respect.
DAMN IT NEVER ENDS IT DONT SEACE-
semas i can only find peace in a peace but god rest in peace.
sware i wanted to curse you out but that would be cursing myself-besides i was just jealous that you escaped this hell-
that was the situation in gen~er~al-you were the gid this should of been my fun~er~al.
warzone!!!!!!!!!!!TONY RAUL VEGA its fucked up i learned your name through a tombstone.AS I SIT ALONE
i see the time line in rewind...
the last breath returns and you injest-there's no death and the bullet comes back out of your chest-the words peace and god bless.
the daps retract!!!!cause thats the last memory i had before such a hanus act- now i snap back.
everything fast forwards quick towards reality-me crying you dying my hands trying to close the hole to your cavaty.
could see the tears~pear from your eyes-you asken why?
me tellen you the lie-"SON IT AINT THAT BAD" but i know the truth inside.
outside-cats bouncen in they rides-cops chalk this up as another homicide.
hell nah son you was to young to be done by a gun-a bullet with no name that just found one.
im sorry TONY damn i hate living in this fallen BABYLON-but i walk each day with R~I~P tatted to my arm to make sure the memeory lives on.


hook:for some reason i want to believe-
if memories survive that means your still alive.............
in my heart you never died so i cry to celebrate your life....

UPPEN

that was deep man...
it was good structure... you just need to put comma's in on the breaks between bars to make it easier to read... but you had nice word play and a great vocab on that... it was tight man.
I liked the hook to

THNK YOU TWIN I'LL TRY THAT ADVICE

yah it was good you had a hot concept but you should work on your vocab

that was an excellent peice homz..the hook was hot...that verse had ill talent...the concept was good...you came well in that 1...i was really feelin it...peace man

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