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03-22-09, 09:06 PM | #1 | ||||||
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Classic Written Pieces
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Members, post your written pieces or links to your pieces in this thread...
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04-22-09, 01:57 PM | #2 | ||||||
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Here is an old piece that I dropped a while ago..
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...ted+penetration Unadulterated Penetration vaginal pain shields any smile, regardless of her needs whilest absorbic acid seeps out of her corroded arteries tragedy strikes brief, emotions of shock remain within slippin a mickey in wiskey proved she's violated by friends regardless of sin, forensic evidence is shown on the forskin no denyin the crime, on victims face, nothin but torment fingerprints n hair folicals prove who the perpetrator is whether its more involved, understand..she'll never have kids with a bruised sterm, punctured lung, damage is shown now she struggles to stand upright, her knee slightly blown out ideas of rehibilation lessen, she grasps the walker slowly flashes of the attack resurface, while here thoughts exploding a marron colour covers her tears, eyeshadow readily smears as pain of disgestin solid foods superseed her thought of fear DNA's embedded under her nails, revealed by flouresant light after that bitter night, she know in the fight for her life at bedside, her life meter fades, overriden by fear of pain deep gasps for breathe aspire, as the doctor proceeds to explain how carramastic the youngster is, despite the vital ordeal and how most who suffer the same fate, mostly end up killed with her face turning plush red, tears descend toward the bed until the wet spot beneath her hair extends to saturate her head amnesia fades quick, at the perpetrators, she began to reminise how one pervert cliched his fist, hittin her dead in the lips on the canvas she sits, awakenin to nightmares in a cold sweat one day she'd hit pubrity, but shes not close to that age yet its a crazed death, dead to the world, none hear your cries even when the pain scream out n introdes into your inner thighs no more can I stand the site, my eyes are watery as I speak and I scolded with the mere fact this girl turn 5 last week & confrontin her parents is insane, I knew this from the start religion fills there souls, but vengence dominates there hearts glancin slowly at red ring on her neck, hatred escalates greater observin the swellin proves that those at fault were not strangers increasing is the anger, the adolescent struggles to open her eye and proceeds to dictate, her short life and how it was deprived now at a whisper, a name escalates throughout her fragile laranyx while her parent comprehend she has a lessen chance of bearin kids she rolls over onto her belly, the doctor monitors the heart device its steadily beats at 85/minute, showin how hard she fights
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05-27-09, 12:38 AM | #3 | ||||||
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That's a sick drop fam..
Long of a read but well worth it, the flow was good, the concept was good and creative the emtion was deep and picture perfect the details was well places the metas was good image I mean what well can I say from top to bottom you stood focus and rip it.... 10/10 The b.e.s.t crew....
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07-05-09, 12:39 PM | #4 | ||||||
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good looking MurDaH187...
I'm in the process of dropping 5 new pieces...I haven't written in a while, but I need to get back into this this... Here are a few topics: Death by Deception High Velocity Portrait of a Misguided Youth Fugitive Mishap Gang Treachery If anyone wants to collab on any of these, let me know...
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07-05-09, 09:15 PM | #5 | ||||||
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you no im down.
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07-06-09, 07:40 AM | #6 | ||||||
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Hey Fly_-E,
Pick one of the topics and write maybe 20 or so lines. I'll match the # of lines that you write and that can be our 1st crew collabo..
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07-06-09, 08:43 AM | #7 | ||||||
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Just dropped a quick piece called "isolated freedom"
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...144#post3279144 "Isolated freedom distorts my vision & breathing under lock & key so look my hairlines reseeding missed my son's birthday, even days of teething pacing back n forth, I angrily await the next feeding handcuff abrasions limit my wrists' movements the swelling decreased to reveal reddish bruises insinuating pain leds me to grind my teeth heavily still recovering from solitare..think its been a week the conception of time's irrelevant...as is my sentence 70 years for what! serving time for a tax evasion sentence What is freedom to a prisons..thoughts keep brain pounding Brains fatigued on my 19th escape plan, stuck on an island technological advices ensure I detail a plan B & C bashing my fist against the wall like I'm using T n T names not chisseled on wall..but echos down the hall prisoners showed respect even before I took the fall tax evasion wasn't the only crime, but I'm in a bind false flaggers are fight starters, tho most are harmless The only six figures I display are on prison garments"
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07-06-09, 10:47 PM | #8 | ||||||
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Death by Deception i'll start tomorrow.
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07-06-09, 10:47 PM | #9 | ||||||
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do 16 lines if its to long people wont care to see but i would do 20 it dontt matter
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07-07-09, 11:34 AM | #10 | |||||||
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Okay, 16 lines is good... i'll piggyback off what you write...
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07-11-09, 01:41 PM | #11 | ||||||
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Heres an apology poetic piece I just dropped:
I married you to show you love & affection Unstead I've shown you that I haven't mastered the lesson to this regret, I promise to try harder & bury my rotten attitude in hopes it blosoms into a garden that'll flower my temper into a more carrying sensitivity I know it must be hell putting up with all my tendencies for these I ask from my heart for forgiveness sometimes I wish that angry wasn't something I'm livin My thoughts are vivid, whilest my wisdom is gaining to treat you respectfully, is what I'm aiming though my gratitude is spiteful, believe I'm working at it but an overnight change wouldn't happen even if I had magic Need to eliminate the hatred, but its hard see when stress and angry daily become a part of me the rage is uncontrollable, hence weighlifing is my escape Maybe is a comp out, but its why I haven't treated you great To this I know a verbal apology just wouldn't be fit cuz anyone can state lies that come from there lips But truthful is my ambition to dedicate a new attitude towards you family that has showed me so much gratitude
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07-11-09, 01:48 PM | #12 | ||||||
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Here is the link to the above drop.
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...338#post3279338 Let me know if anyone else wants to collabo of the other topics: Death by Deception High Velocity Portrait of a Misguided Youth Fugitive Mishap Gang Treachery
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08-22-09, 07:00 PM | #13 | ||||||
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how about MurDah on ya Block as a topic??
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08-22-09, 07:03 PM | #14 | ||||||
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lol possibility. anymore ideas nice one murdah.
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12-08-09, 01:13 PM | #15 | ||||||
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Alright, I decided to stay with this text stuff... I'm going to do solo collabs until people want to collabo... My next drop is:
***ENDEAVER THROUGH WILDERNESS***
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