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06-24-08, 09:14 AM | #1 | ||||
Peace, Love, Unity
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They control you with your fear.
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Banging my sword on my shield. Chanting a war cry,
In blood stained clothes, watching cannon balls soar by, Facing a thousand guns, here stands a man with his pen, Chest out and head high but will I stand in the end? Ignorance. What a deafening noise. Supressing their voice, While I am just passionately handling my weapon of choice, Welcoming all those who are prepared to embrace my art, Saying "Take a look." When I'm really saying "Take my heart." Hoping it won't break apart. Think weapons can hurt you? They could never affect my life like the presence of words do, No knife or gun could stop me when these jaws tell tales, Because violence isn't inspiration. It's "If all else fails." It's a madman's last resort when his sentences aren't true, But if violence is your answer, how intelligent are you? They take aim with their rifles while I play colorful music, Yelling "Give peace a chance!" as I strum an acoustic, Humming a blue's riff as soldiers march to quiet me, But I won't go silently, threatening remarks don't frighten me, Why? I live on through this paper when I lay in my plot, Because noone is dead until they are forgot... So bury me. Last edited by Kirk : 06-24-08 at 09:23 AM. |
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06-24-08, 09:17 AM | #2 | ||||
Peace, Love, Unity
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06-24-08, 10:47 AM | #3 | ||||||||
Pushin it....
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nigga wheres the belt buckle??
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06-25-08, 05:06 AM | #4 | |||||
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real nice shit kirk...you had some really dope lines....and I loved the length of it...it was perfect..you didn't try to do too much...and yet...your transitions were so smooth that i wasn't left thinking that there needs to be more...you also had a pretty good rhyme scheme...with a few multis here and there...which made the flow damn near perfect....i really liked you're opener...it set the tone for the rest of the piece...and beneath that opener...as i said...are extremely relevant and well crafted lines that conveyed your message brilliantly........and than...the closer....talk about quotables....that shit is sig worthy....i would wear that like a badge of honor my friend....good shit.
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06-25-08, 11:48 PM | #5 | ||||||
Banned: Biting
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lyrically the best on this site so far
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06-28-08, 09:37 AM | #6 | ||||
Peace, Love, Unity
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Uppin..........
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06-29-08, 08:34 PM | #7 | |||||
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really passionate bud, i liked it. very involving vocab, which really took ahold of me as i was reading, and made it all the more enjoyable. what else can i say really, it all flowed together, it was creative, imaginitive, great emotion... keep writing dude
No knife or gun could stop me when these jaws tell tales, Because violence isn't inspiration. It's "If all else fails." It's a madman's last resort when his sentences aren't true, But if violence is your answer, how intelligent are you? wicked stuff.
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06-29-08, 08:39 PM | #8 | |||||
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Good Lyrics Nice Vocab
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06-30-08, 04:33 AM | #9 | ||||
Peace, Love, Unity
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^Ban this chump.
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