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11-06-03, 10:44 PM | #1 | ||||||
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You Are Tough Eh?
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you think u know best jus
because u spit one good verse conversating wit me about ur bran new purse i see soo many intellectual minds spreading their dangerious rhymes they burst flowing shredding peepz while leaving their remains to a nurse all u catz with strong fire be manupilating my mind telling me to sloww down cause they don't know about ma rhymes but i keep building taking in the advice of the "wise" the anguish i have building inside i'm a gunna, i ain't afraid to get stunned when i flow i ain't never afraid to get bunned but get me angry is crutial u'll get runned let me hear wat u have to say bout this shit i showned Last edited by bloodshedd : 11-06-03 at 10:46 PM. |
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11-06-03, 11:14 PM | #2 | |||||||
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ok ok,. that was aiight...you coudl work on the flwo a lil bit, i can tell from the flow you have this is supposed to go a lil slow which is cool, that's your style, but soem of your end syllabel rhymes were so so at best, work on your rhyming some, your message was solid, i felt it, your vocab was a lil young but that's cool too, work on the rhymes, get soem battles, (im up for whenever) up ya rep and ull be fine
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11-06-03, 11:18 PM | #3 | ||||
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HE means overall "good drop" Peace
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11-06-03, 11:44 PM | #4 | |||||||
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This Piece Sucked Dude....u SERIOUSLY Need To Up Your Wordplay.....Throw In Some Multis....Add Some Imagery.......Think Hard.....
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11-07-03, 11:51 AM | #5 | |||||||
one wink
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Your replies to others?
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11-08-03, 11:48 PM | #6 | ||||||
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Little weak..will excuse it though..just work on wordplay and elevate..will all come with time..later peace
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11-09-03, 12:36 AM | #7 | ||||||
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it was aiight dawg it still needs work and shit try putting in multis and make tha lines a bit longer
Aiight Peace (v) |
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