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Old 09-01-04, 11:42 PM   #1
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tell me what you see

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when you look into my eyes tell me what you see
you see pain an suffering of a lost soul
lost so much, miss so many, only loved one
all i can do is pitty,. she won't come back
it hurts so much to know, i ruined it all,
we had to grow. miss her so much
i try not to allow it to show.
but then you look in my eyes, and then it all
comes out, all the pain and sorrow.

ya another short one, drop some feed n i'll get back at you
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Old 09-03-04, 06:19 PM   #2
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feed back plz leave a link n i'll get back at ya
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Old 09-09-04, 12:01 AM   #3
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damn quit sleepin uppin
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Old 09-09-04, 12:17 AM   #4
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i was feelin this poem short -n- sweet i like that.....i give this a 7/10
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Old 09-09-04, 02:17 AM   #5
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This was a keystyle, right? It was too choppy. Didn't flow too nice. I saw the though but I didn't feel the thought in this piece, you feel me? You wasn't articulate enough. Keep elevating though.
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Old 09-11-04, 01:44 AM   #6
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ay thanks fa da feed...still uppin
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