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Old 12-13-06, 01:42 AM   #1
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"Have Mercy"...Past Tense and L.E...Dope Shit...RTF WILL BE RETURNED

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Verse One- Past Tense
Verse Two- L.E

Beat- Dunno.

Word, nice little track.

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Old 12-13-06, 01:43 AM   #2
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Old 12-13-06, 02:43 AM   #3
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listening...like i told past tense..im using this beat for my next cd i do believe......

past...delivery is nice..BUT..one thing i think you coulda done with this beat...and with the way your verse was written...flow and all....is maybe you shoulda made your voice a bit softer and rapped it with more of a melody..not so much singing..but you know..the singing/rapping thing...i think that would sound dope with this beat...then if u have someone straight rappin on the 2nd verse..it would be a nice mix...but either way..your verse was nice man..i can def. relate to it for real...only part lyrically i can complain about is when u say..."if u think that i suck"...i think u prolly just worded that part a lil different...thats is all my friend...

LE..lmao man..i gotta admit..i love your opening lines...the ocean wouldnt hold every sin i put in it...thats dope man....lyrically shit is illin dude for real...your dubs arent lined up real well...def. check up on that...it sounds kinda weird when you say your dubs like a tenth of a second before u say the words in your verse...flow was coo..could be somewhat smoother..but for the most part..u did it pretty nice..


overall dope tracks fellas....hopefully my feed helped a lil bit in improvement...1
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Old 12-13-06, 01:39 PM   #4
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thanks for the feed man

we uppin this come on now
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Old 12-13-06, 02:30 PM   #5
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listening

it starts softly..and i like it!

beat is cool..feeling it

past you come in well..yeah no much highs as usual..nice nice!..your voice sounds a lil more mature than usual..your flow was steady..u sound plane with ur emotion on this...like every normal spit!..but its a decent drop tho


hook is sampled so cool


L.E i'm feeling your lyrics more...you spit this a lil too hard for it..shuda been a lil more soft...your flow is iight but ur presence seems unstable..like you was a lil unconfident..sorta like rushed some words to catch up with the beat..


i liked this but i didnt like the way it ended...shuda faded it out or something!


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Old 12-13-06, 07:15 PM   #6
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ight i like this, was thinkin about hoppin on, but le was quick to grab it......
past tense - im worried dude, you dont sound better.....you sound good but i had hoped you woulda elevated a bit more.....you seem to have a problem sticking to rhyme scheme flow, you switch it up alot which is good but hard to follow sometiems a more smooth approach woulda been nice with this beat....but still really good, just some stuff to inspire you to get better

le - your lyrics are good, your voice is gettin there, you seem like you have alot of siliva to deal with, not a slur but close....your verse is more smooth but goes by quick nothing really stuck out to me except the first line....still a good verse, production wise think your dubs are a lil loud but thats just me otherwise good track both of you and keep em comin
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Old 12-13-06, 08:01 PM   #7
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Beat's alright.....actually, I kinda like it. The sample at the beginning could get annoying, but I kinda liked it too.

PTs Flow was pretty nice for the mood of the song. Only thing I didn't like is how you sometimes try to rhyme words that almost rhyme.....like when you tried with off/god. You also get a little too comfortable with your flow. It's almost like you are used to how you're spitting so you won't stray from it. Kinda like your lines are all exactly the same, just different words. I don't know how to explain it any better....lol.


LE needed to brush up on the flow a little. Just seemed like he was cramming too many words into a line. Presence was nice though. You definitely sounded a lot more comfortable than the last time I heard you.


Not a bad track overall.....just a couple of areas to polish up a bit


Ohh yea......how hard is it to fade the beat out when the song is about to end? That's like a huge fuckin pet peeve of mine.......lol
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Old 12-19-06, 01:43 AM   #8
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Thanks for the feed.

Up and away.

I know I'm a little bit rusty lol...it's been a looooonngggg time. First track in a couple months for me.
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Old 12-19-06, 02:21 AM   #9
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definately a hott track yall should remix this loop the beat and grab me 86 and enygma to kill it

lyrically both stayed on point flow was a lil better from the pt camp le gotta get that fluent style for something smooth like this i definately was feelin this tho some hott ish
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