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11-27-03, 03:25 PM | #1 | ||||||
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Have you ever been in love with a being in your head?
Have you ever watched a sunset behind closed eyes instead? Have you ever seen a weeping willow laughing with the wind? Have you ever seen a dying bird cradlings its broken wing? Have you ever seen a bleeding man falling in the street? Have you ever seen a hidden message, echoing so discrete? Have you opened your eyes? Have you seen real life? Have you smiled enough? Have you loved enough? Have you touched the pain? Have you laughed at sorrow? Have you watched your demise? Have you… Have you… Last edited by Dr.Gonzo : 11-27-03 at 03:40 PM. |
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11-27-03, 03:38 PM | #2 | ||||||
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Re: have you
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ya
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11-27-03, 04:20 PM | #3 | |||||||
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a simple written piece, but one that makes you think, and try to answer those questions, one that arent asked oh so often. its a unique piece, and a nice read, theres not much to say about it because its so simple and to the point.
~Tera~ DONT HATE
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11-27-03, 07:27 PM | #4 | |||||||
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good piece, keep elavet your structure and flow try and up your vocab your imagery and emotion is great keep that up pz
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11-28-03, 07:37 PM | #5 | |||||||
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Beautiful.
Thats all I can say. Kudos~
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