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04-20-05, 09:52 PM | #1 | ||||
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1st Keystyle...
IP: F4CA 1A66
Iight i never did a keystyle before
If your alive today its because of that Eve ate that apple* So im doin her job today,merkin you in a short sample/ But everybody knows that shed puke it if she knew that But shes eat it to repuke it up if shed knew u started to rap/ Armada's talking about bitch's and nice childrens hes 31 one watchin kid porn and still a fucking vergin/ If he types so badly its bcuz teres sperm between the letters Same lyrics everytime,cuz his keyboard's all sticked togetter/ But mister's dissin canada with his stereotip and shit Im a rock fan![sarcasme] imma fuck you up in a mochpit!/** He sounds like he have the same portrait than Hephaitos Without the power....only the shame and the ridiculous/*** Keystyle! *Adam & Eve ** Quebec = Rock people or rap hater[Sarcasme] ***One of Zeus's child,hes the uglyes of the family |
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04-20-05, 09:53 PM | #2 | ||||
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IP: F4CA 1A66
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04-21-05, 04:39 PM | #3 | ||||
Hell yeah
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IP: B1F1 D399
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04-21-05, 09:49 PM | #4 | ||||
Hell yeah
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IP: 39AF 3A82
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04-21-05, 11:00 PM | #5 | |||||||
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IP: 2E75 EE69
it's good for a beginner, but you have a LONG way to go man....work on your flow most of all.....i don't exactly like your rhyme scheme once but i guess its your first time so yea.....keep workin at it and you'll get better!! can you crit my shit? here's my link, i'll post it when i get it lol
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04-21-05, 11:01 PM | #6 | |||||||
Detrimental Thoughts
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IP: 2E75 EE69
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04-22-05, 09:24 AM | #7 | ||||
Hell yeah
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IP: 07B7 AC03
thx...upppiinnn
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04-22-05, 03:53 PM | #8 | ||||
Hell yeah
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IP: D882 E596
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04-22-05, 04:31 PM | #9 | ||||
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IP: 0825 899A
Well this was an okay drop...
You had good structure... i feel you should stop with the // cuz it just makes ya verse look sloppy.. Next:You could really elevate on wordplay, and stretch your vocab , ... Maybe if this was a little longer , it could have been better... but overall it needs elevation.. keep it up, just try to use better wordplay , and some punchlines.. keep it up ..
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04-23-05, 03:54 PM | #10 | |||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: D162 98A9
so thats the big diss that took you a month to get ready and drop?
well ima say it was ight, im not gonna be a lili hater in say it was weak cuz it wasnt it was ight ya punches were a little foolish at some points but sort of creative ide hit u back real quick but ive squashed beef wit the E.F. so ima jus say good job elevate on some harder punches n maybe a few hard personals I mean if i wasnt me i could tare myself up like a motha fucker hmmmm i mite drop a diss aganst myself that would be great |
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04-23-05, 04:26 PM | #11 | |||||
in your system
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IP: 9E2F CDE8
i think it was pretty decent, for a quick key, except the last bar, which didn't really rhyme, and was just stupid, but it was pretty decent, work at it, you could drop some fire, keep up man
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